Talk:ʻAkahi/GA1
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:25, 27 April 2018 (UTC)
I'll be starting this soon. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:25, 27 April 2018 (UTC)
- The blacklist links template has got to go.
- If no image is available, so be it. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:26, 27 April 2018 (UTC)
- Maybe add a sentence about something she did as high chief in the lede.
- She didn't do much of note besides held land and married politically active chiefs. The Catholic sympathy incident seems marginal to mention in introduction.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- "became one of the wives" would it make more sense to say "married?" perhaps add the year of the marriage, if available.
- Changed but there are no known dates.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- "In his own right" remove, as it is unnecessary.
- Changed.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- "was known commonly by foreigners" because was is used a bit before in the sentence, perhaps rephrase as "and commonly known by foreigners as..."
- Changed.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- "attended by the chiefs and foreign residents." this reads like all the chiefs and foreign residents attended. Perhaps clarify.
- Changed.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- "Her second husband Kalanimoku," saying "her second husband" is unnecessary, because it is described above.
- Changed.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- Source 7 needs a URL to determine verifiability.
- Added back in.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- KAVEBEAR: I think I will be promoting upon conclusion of my problems. Eddie891 Talk Work 12:43, 5 May 2018 (UTC)
Will address this on the weekend.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 07:05, 9 May 2018 (UTC)
@Eddie891: Addressed all points.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:59, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- See No reason not to promote. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:52, 16 May 2018 (UTC)