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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492
[edit]- Prose comments from Crisco 1492
- "This season ... In this episode" - Seems repetitive
- "The Truth" was the series finale of The X-Files television series," - Didn't you just note that it was the series finale in the first paragraph?
- "Carter would return to the X-Files universe with a second feature film," - Don't think "second" is necessary here, as it begs the question: what was the first?
- Lots of quotes. Three in the first paragraph of writing alone.
- Spotnitz explained that Chris made the announcement - That Chris? It should be Carter
- Colonising on 21 or 22 December?
- Odd how Marita ends up among a whole bunch of dead people. I don't think she was killed, was she? May need to be reshuffled. It reads "dead, dead, dead, living, dead, dead..."
- " The rooms seen in the episode were the main rooms for the power plant. The X-Files crew turned it into what they called a "war room". Most of the decoration and interior scene was done by the visual effect crew; the only visible part seen in real life was a large generator that pumped water." - Reads rather awkward. What was the war room? The plant? The only part visible where?
- "spiny black horned toad" - Any idea what species this is?
- Looks to be a Horned lizard
- More tomorrow... — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:27, 23 September 2012 (UTC)
- Got them. The only one I disagree with is the "This season ... In this episode". One provides a synopsis for the show/season, and the line other is used to introduce the episode.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 23:48, 24 September 2012 (UTC)
- Fair enough.
- Got them. The only one I disagree with is the "This season ... In this episode". One provides a synopsis for the show/season, and the line other is used to introduce the episode.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 23:48, 24 September 2012 (UTC)
- In his book "Freedom and Worldviews in The X-Files", a chapter of The Philosophy of The X-Files, he notes that the final scene "undermines Mulder's seemingly persistent scorn of traditional" religion and his subtle acceptance of theism. - Perhaps "In his book The Philosophy of The X-Files he notes that the final scene "undermines Mulder's seemingly persistent scorn of traditional" religion and his subtle acceptance of theism.", leaving the chapter out of it. "In his book [chapter]" is certainly incorrect.
- " In the end, however, both Pandora's box and the world of The X-Files contain hope, which, in the legend, was the only thing in the box that Pandora did not let go" - Let go (of) or release?
- "Nielsen ratings are audience measurement systems" - I thought Nielsen was only one system
- A little heavy on quotes in the last section of the article. I count two multiple-sentence quotes. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:26, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed the book issues, added the missing word, killed the 's', and tried to paraphrase better. How's it look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:46, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
- Still a CN tag — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:04, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
- I killed it. GRAPPLE X 04:07, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
- Still a CN tag — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:04, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed the book issues, added the missing word, killed the 's', and tried to paraphrase better. How's it look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:46, 25 September 2012 (UTC)