Any of the individuals in the first paragraph of Inception notable?
Plane probably is, but I don't think redlinking her is a good idea. You pick your fights on redlinking. If this were an article about the UDC, I might feel differently.
20 feet (6.1 m) square. - Ambiguous, perhaps 20 square feet (1.9 m2) or 400 square feet (37 m2) to be unambiguous.
I believe that a somewhat larger figure for the metric would have been expressed had area been intended. Still, I've made a change.
Why is Plane referred to as "Mrs. Plane" throughout?
Borglum was busy between the passage of the bill and the end of May 1924 first with the Children's Founders Roll medal, and then with the half dollar. - Confused as to what you are trying to say here
In all, Borglum made nine plaster models for the design. - A footnote about what was standard at the time may prove enlightening
I'm not aware of any statistics being kept on the matter. Obviously a minimum of two, but I have no sources and I doubt records are complete. Many Mint records were destroyed in the 1970s, alas.
Stonewall Jackson -> Why Stonewall here (yes, I know it's his nickname, but I don't recall it showing up earlier)
Changed to "General". We call Lee "General" once. Jackson by itself may escapt the reader.
Both Borglum and the Association made accusations of graft; - Semi-colon doesn't feel right here.
I've tweaked the sentence to make the connection a bit clearer.
the South, including Oklahoma and the District of Columbia. - Don't quite think D.C. is "the South" as implied by this wording (my knowledge of US geography is lacking, so I can't say anything about Oklahoma). Perhaps another word, instead of "including"?
The Atlanta lawyer, a Democrat, - Didn't you mention his leanings earlier?
That's it... very good job. Comment though... do we have articles on any commemoratives which actually raised the money they were meant to? I think all of yours that I've reviewed were abject failures. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:17, 1 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
