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TFA blurb review

Dvenadsat Apostolov (Twelve Apostles) was a pre-dreadnought battleship built for the Imperial Russian Navy, the sole ship of her class. Armed with four 12-inch (305 mm) guns, she entered service in 1893 with the Black Sea Fleet, but was not fully ready until the following year. The ship participated in the failed attempt to recapture the mutinous battleship Potemkin in 1905. Decommissioned and disarmed in 1911, Dvenadsat Apostolov became an immobile submarine depot ship the next year. The ship was captured by the Germans in 1918 during World War I and was handed over to the Allies in December. Lying immobile in Sevastopol, she was captured by both sides in the Russian Civil War before she was abandoned when the White Russians evacuated the Crimea in 1920. Dvenadsat Apostolov was used as a stand-in for the title ship during the 1925 filming of Battleship Potemkin before she was finally scrapped in 1931. (Full article...)

Just a suggested blurb ... I didn't make any changes, apart from tweaking links and adding a sentence about the guns (the blurb was a little short). Fine work. - Dank (push to talk) 23:32, 17 July 2019 (UTC)

Thanks, but I think that I'd like to tweak it a bit more than usual. How does that read? And is it too short, now? My only concern now is the repeated use of immobile.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:40, 18 July 2019 (UTC)

933 characters ... looks good to me. - Dank (push to talk) 01:52, 18 July 2019 (UTC)