Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Meth mouth/archive1
Addressed comments from Crisco 1492
[edit]- Prose comments
- Meth mouth is a dental condition characterized by severe tooth decay and fracture, tooth loss, enamel erosion, and other oral problems symptomatic of extended use of the drug methamphetamine (meth). - Any way to avoid tooth -- tooth?
- The legitimacy of "meth mouth" - why the scare quotes?
- for active users because of the cardiac problems that can result from the interaction of local anesthetic with methamphetamine. - perhaps make it clear earlier that these are meth users, as "active users" may be ambiguous
- The second paragraph of the lede has "dentists" three times... perhaps reorder it somehow?
- canine teeth or canines
- The condition has been popularized by media coverage and case reports. - Contrasts rather starkly with the rest of the paragraph. Is that the best place to put the sentence?
- Any more information on the media portrayals, such as in film or on TV?
- I did a copyedit, be sure to double check. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:45, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the comments, I think I took care of all but the last of them. Copyedits look fine. The only specific depiction that I could find sourcing for was in Breaking Bad, and I didn't want to just list the name of one program. I just checked again, and there's a source for its depiction in The City Addicted to Crystal Meth as well, but I'm hesitant to start listing "in popular culture"-type mentions. Mark Arsten (talk) 14:46, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
- Perhaps general themes would be enough, doesn't have to give examples. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:48, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
- I added a little, what that what you had in mind? Mark Arsten (talk) 16:12, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
- Perhaps general themes would be enough, doesn't have to give examples. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:48, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the comments, I think I took care of all but the last of them. Copyedits look fine. The only specific depiction that I could find sourcing for was in Breaking Bad, and I didn't want to just list the name of one program. I just checked again, and there's a source for its depiction in The City Addicted to Crystal Meth as well, but I'm hesitant to start listing "in popular culture"-type mentions. Mark Arsten (talk) 14:46, 30 September 2012 (UTC)