Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Fôrça Bruta/archive2

Blurb review

Any comments or changes for this suggested TFA blurb? - Dank (push to talk) 16:30, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Fôrça Bruta (Brute Force) is the seventh studio album by Brazilian singer-songwriter and guitarist Jorge Ben, recorded with the Trio Mocotó band and released by Philips Records in September 1970. It introduced an acoustic samba-based music that was mellower, moodier, and less ornate than Ben's preceding work. In a largely unrehearsed nighttime recording session, the singer improvised and experimented with unconventional rhythmic arrangements, musical techniques, and elements of soul, funk, and rock. Ben's lyrics explored themes of romantic passion, melancholy, sensuality, and—in a departure from the carefree sensibility of past releases—identity politics and elements of postmodernism. A commercial and critical success, Fôrça Bruta established Ben as a leading artist in Brazil's Tropicália movement and pioneered a sound later known as samba rock. The album's first American release came in 2007, the same year that Rolling Stone Brasil named it the 61st greatest Brazilian music record.

Looks good. I would suggest adding "with Trio Mocoto's groove-based accompaniment" after "the singer improvised". Dan56 (talk) 05:08, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Groove (music) makes it sound like "groove" means little more than "whatever's groovy". Would "ostinato" or "funk" work? - Dank (push to talk) 05:32, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I stand by "groove" as a distinctive musical term. And ostinatos are not necessarily rhythmic. But if you object, then it can just be "accompaniment". Dan56 (talk) 05:56, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe a brief mention of its first American release in 2007: "In 2007, Rolling Stone Brasil named it the 61st greatest Brazilian music record while Dusty Groove America released it for the first time in the United States." I am aware of a character limit for TFAs, so perhaps mentioning this would be more significant than the "accompaniment" bit. Dan56 (talk) 06:25, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Is there a connection? If not, I'd rather put the two clauses in separate sentences. - Dank (push to talk) 13:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

No connection. Sure, separate them. Dan56 (talk) 13:33, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That was 1051 characters, so I trimmed a little ... in the shorter form, they probably do have to go in the same sentence ... I used "the same year". - Dank (push to talk) 14:08, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Good work! Looks good. Dan56 (talk) 15:20, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for suggesting this as a TFA, by the way. This was a special project for me. But if it is chosen for TFA, can you get it page-protected beforehand? Dan56 (talk) 09:06, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The blurb is protected automatically 24 hours before its Main Page day. I don't handle page protection for TFA articles, but yes, they are getting some form of protection on Main Page day more often than not, last I checked ... generally the admins wait until there's some vandalism, but not always.