Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Hot Potato (video game)
This is one of those smaller games that I sometimes write up-- I'm thinking about working it up to good article status. I'd really like a general review of the article to make sure that it's all worked out and where the article could really use expansion. Much obliged. -- Nomader (Talk) 03:23, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Comments from Hulk16
- In the opening sentence it says that it is a "action puzzle video game", but in the infobox it says only puzzle as its genre.
- Changed the genre to "action puzzle".
- You should split the history section into development and reception sections.
- Per the Organization section of our article guidelines, I think I'm going to stick with a history section... I only have one interview with the developers to go by, and they only asked three mediocre questions.
- The second paragraph of the lead and the last paragraph both have pov statements; "humorous charm and amusing gameplay" and " quirky charm and amusing gameplay."
- Removed them.
- In the history section it says " Craig Harris of IGN played an early build of the game at E3 and did not grasp the game's basic concept." How is this notable or important?
- It isn't really, is it? Removed that sentence.
- If you could find any sales numbers that would help out a reception section.
- I would love some sales numbers too, but no dice. I've searched every possible way in every possible place and I've got nothing. With the smaller games I work with, I've kinda come to accept that sales numbers are blessings.
- Finally, I think the development part of the article needs the most expansion. Right now it is only one sentence.
- I did my best to expand it a bit but I again don't have much to work with.
Beyond that, this article looks good. Keep up the good work. Hulk16 (talk)
- I tried to address your concerns as best as I could-- thanks for the review, I really do appreciate it. -- Nomader (Talk) 05:29, 6 July 2010 (UTC)