Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Thomas Hines

Thomas Hines

Thomas Hines is high on my list on subjects I wanted to reach FA sometime. I have made a major overhaul of the article, and request it be inspected to see if it could pass a GA review.--King Bedford I ^{Seek his grace} 02:21, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Woody

Overall, a good article, some comments:

"...as an grammar instructor." Is that meant to be ironic? ;) (a grammar instructor)

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Hines was five feet nine inches tall, and weighed a mere 140 pounds. You need the metric equivalents and non-breaking spaces in-between the measurements. (written as 140 pounds)

I've never been good at this. When this gets DYK exposure on Main Page, it will be done by someone.

No idea what this is meant to say: "(known are known to serve in the Union army). "

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I am not aware of the ranking system of the Confederate Army, but was he promoted to First Lieutenant or Second Lieutenant or was it just Lieutenant then?

Source does not specify

Captain is a DAB page, please correct the link.

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The gravestone image is way too big, please leave it at default thumb size.

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I know you made the Image:Hines Raid Map.jpg, but we could do with the book that you photocopied it from for licensing purpose (or provide the original).

It was made for my Master's Thesis, entitled Galloping Up the Glen" pg.25--King Bedford I ^{Seek his grace} 15:24, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

With reference to "despite the rules of law, " what rules of law? This needs to be explained for the general reader.

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"...the Confederate officers used hooks to climb the twenty-five foot tall wall effortless..." That needs rewording as it makes no sense.

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The misinformation section needs to be sourced, referenced and cited.

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You can remove the ==see also == section as the links are already in the text as a {{see also}} hatnote.

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References should be renamed "Notes" and the sources section can remain the same, or renamed to References as is convention.

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So, overall, there are a lot of problems with prose. It needs a good read-through before any FAC, though it seems to be complete. It just needs finishing now. Some more references are needed in places, though I think it will be ready for GAN after you fix some of the above issues. If you have any questions, you can leave them at my talkpage or here. Regards. Woody (talk) 12:11, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It is looking better. I would suggest that you put it up for GAN, but before ACR/FAC, I would strongly suggest it undergoes a copyedit. You might want to list it at WP:MHL to find a copy-editor. Regards. Woody (talk) 20:06, 7 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Borg Sphere

It's a very good start, and I learned a lot from reading it. Here are some comments:

In the lead, cite being on the Kentucky Court of Appeals, and the resemblance to John Wilkes Booth. Fixed
In Early Life there was a typo; I went ahead and fixed this for you.
"Coolness and leadership" needs a citation.. Fixed
Colonel Duke's comment about how lazy he is needs to be cited.. Fixed
Cincinnati, Ohio should only be linked the first time it occurs.. Fixed

Besides that I don't see any real problems. It is an excellent B-class, and would probably pass GAN now. I wish you luck on A-Class and FA. Borg Sphere (talk) 14:48, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I think I corrected all the problems you saw (I believe I saw what you meant by lazy).--King Bedford I ^{Seek his grace} 15:36, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]