Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Korean War/Archive 1
I have been editing this article for a few days. I ran down through the article and fixed any grammer mistakes I could find. I would appreciate any suggestions on what to do and how I can really improve it further. Thanks a lot. Mr. Killigan 06:17, 12 July 2007 (UTC)
Kirill Lokshin
[edit]There are a number of areas to work on, at this point; keep in mind, though, that this is a very high-profile article, so you should be careful to move slowly and carefully to avoid getting entangled in any editorial conflicts here.
The article is, in my opinion, simply too long; we're looking at 72K (~12,000 words) of prose. The "Legacy" section, in particular, is ripe for splitting out into a separate Legacy of the Korean War article, with a much shorter summary left in the main one."Korean War (1950 – 1953)" should really be something like "Course of the war"; you probably don't want to repeat the article title as a section heading.- The citations need cleanup; at a minimum, all of the embedded external links should be converted to footnotes. There are also a number of "citation needed" tags floating around. Beyond that, more thorough citation would be appropriate throughout the article; see WP:MILHIST#CITE for some guidelines.
The "Depictions" section should be turned into prose, rather than a laundry list of films; see also WP:MILHIST#POP.The "Names" section, as it's presently constituted, would work much better as a narrow sidebar; it's of some interest, but I doubt there's enough material to sustain a separate section.The "See also" section should be eliminated. If something isn't worth linking from the text, it's generally not worth linking at all.The rump "Bibliography" section should be removed as well.- The "External links" section could use trimming.
Hope that helps! Kirill 04:08, 13 July 2007 (UTC)cool
- Thank you very much for offering your opinion! Mr. Killigan 00:57, 14 July 2007 (UTC)