Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Ivan Vladislav of Bulgaria
I have expanded the article, User:Cplakidas kindly corrected some grammatical, punctuational and semantic mistakes and I wonder if there is a chance to submit it for a GA. I would welcome and address (if I can) all suggestions for further improvement. Thank you. --Gligan (talk) 14:29, 30 October 2010 (UTC)
AustralianRupert
[edit]I can't really comment on the content, sorry (seems okay to me, though), but I have the following nitpicky style suggestions (feel free to ignore if you wish):
- I think that there are a couple of sentences that need citations:
- in the Life before section, "His life during the subsequent decades and until his accession is unknown."
- Well, I could not find a citation literary saying that. Since there is no information on that, the historians usually begin with how Ivan Vladislav was saved young and then continue with his seizure of the throne. Therefore it is obvious that there is no information on his life during that period.
- No worries, that seems fine. In order not to have this count against the article in a higher assessment, though, I suggest adding a note beside that sentence explaining this. AustralianRupert (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- Well, I could not find a citation literary saying that. Since there is no information on that, the historians usually begin with how Ivan Vladislav was saved young and then continue with his seizure of the throne. Therefore it is obvious that there is no information on his life during that period.
- in the Assumption of power subsection, "Ivan Vladislav then seized the Bulgarian throne and took steps to ensure his position against potential rivals."
- Done.
- in the Legacy section, "Ivan Vladislav Point on Rugged Island in the South Shetland Islands, Antarctica is named after Ivan Vladislav of Bulgaria."
- Done (in fact what I added is the link the article of Ivan Vladislav Point with a map of the Island of Livingstone and the surrounding isles where most of the Bulgarian-named Antarctic geographic features are).
- in the Life before section, "His life during the subsequent decades and until his accession is unknown."
- page ranges in the Notes section should have endashes instead of hyphens per WP:DASH;
- Done.
- Citation # 23 "Wasilewski, T. (in Polish). History of Bulgaria. pp. 290." is inconsistently formatted - as it is a single page it should be "p." in stead of "pp.";
- Done.
- "Kazhdan (1991)" seems inconsistent with the other citations that don't include the year. They should all be the same format, I think;
- Done.
- there is a "Who?" tag in the Legacy section that should be dealt with and removed before taking the article to higher review;
- The Byzantine historian is not mentioned in the book and I have talked with Constantine on that. I have put a note instead of the who tag which explains that.
- in the Assumption of power subsection and the Legacy section you have spaced emdashs, but per WP:DASH emdashes should not be spaced (endashes can be, though);
- I don't understand what you mean here. User:TodorBozhinov has done those dashes but I don't know how you suggest to substitute them... Can you do it yourself?
- No worries, I've fixed this for you. It is a very very minor Manual of Style point, so don't worry too much. AustralianRupert (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- I don't understand what you mean here. User:TodorBozhinov has done those dashes but I don't know how you suggest to substitute them... Can you do it yourself?
- in the References section, in the titles of the Gyuzelev and Zlatarski works there is an emdash used in the year ranges, however, per WP:DASH it should be an endash;
- Done.
- in the References section, the titles should be capitalised per WP:MOSCAPS#Composition titles, e.g. ""Part II. From the Slavinization of the country to the fall of the First Empire (852—1018). VI. Struggle for independence" should be ""Part II. From the Slavinization of the Country to the Fall of the First Empire (852–1018). VI. Struggle for Independence". AustralianRupert (talk) 12:18, 1 November 2010 (UTC)
- Done.
- I am sorry for my delay to address your recommendations. I would like to thank you for the review and will answer above the separate points you have noted. Regards, --Gligan (talk) 13:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- No worries at all, it looks good. Keep up the good work. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for the kind words, although most credits should be given to the users Ałiku who wrote the article in the Polish Wikipedia and Cplakidas who corrected my mistakes. Best, --Gligan (talk) 10:44, 7 November 2010 (UTC)
- No worries at all, it looks good. Keep up the good work. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- I am sorry for my delay to address your recommendations. I would like to thank you for the review and will answer above the separate points you have noted. Regards, --Gligan (talk) 13:11, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
- Done.