Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Enfield revolver
As the other major British service revolver (besides the Webley Revolver), I think the Enfield deserves an equally good article, but would like some input so I have some idea what needs improvement and what can be left as-is. I realise people will bring up the citations thing (which I am working on), so I'd prefer to get input relating to other aspects of the article if possible. --Commander Zulu 11:15, 7 August 2007 (UTC)
Kirill Lokshin
[edit]Ignoring citations for the moment—I'm sure you're on top of that issue at this point—there are a few areas that could be improved:
- The lead should probably be lengthened to present a bit more information; as it is, it says very little about the revolver itself.
- The combination of the infobox and the image at the top of the "Enfield No. 2 Mk I Revolver" section causes a problem on smaller monitor resolutions. I'm not sure what the best layout here would be, but some sort of staggering is needed to keep the column of text from being squeezed into non-existence.
- The structure of the "Variants" section is pretty bizarre; the bulk of the content is logically in the second subsection, even where it relates to the topic of the first. To be honest, I don't see the point of having the sub-sections there; it would be better, I think, to just have this material in a single, continuous section.
- The bolding in the "Other manufacturers" section shouldn't be there; straightforward paragraphs would work better there than an attempt at definition-style writing, in any case.
- There's very little discussion of the performance of the No. 2 Mk I in combat. Is this due to a lack of sources, or some other reason? I would have expected there to be something, if only in the form of anecdotes from individual soldiers.
Overall, though, this is quite nice; keep up the good work! Kirill 03:40, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
- Reply- Thanks for the input, Kirill... I've taken most of it on board, and it's greatly appreciated. Seeing how it all goes, I might then submit the article for either A-class or FA-class review soon, too. --Commander Zulu 05:37, 12 August 2007 (UTC)