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I am putting this article up for peer review because it has failed an A-class review and would like to know people's thoughts on what further revisions must be done so that it meets A-class standards.XavierGreen (talk) 14:01, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Kirk

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  • I'd like to see a few more references in an A-class article and there's quite a few statements missing a reference, for example, the first sentence in the Battle section.
I added an additional source, replaced another with a better one, and added a few more citations from some other sources already used.XavierGreen (talk) 04:49, 19 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The prose only has 7 paragraphs - seems too short to me. For example, I would recommend expanding the Battle section to have subsections/paragraphs for meeting the enemy, the flight of the german forces, the split of the british into two groups, and the endgame (sinking, rescue).
  • It would be nice if the text matched the lettering in the diagram, and its not a very good diagram because its hand written and not to scale - I bet you could find a better one somewhere.(I'll look too).
  • The significance of this action is the early victory for the British and the annihilation of the Germany naval force. There probably was some kind of minor public relations push to highlight this victory, which you allude to in the text as a 'morale boost' but doesn't have its own section. Also, as you mentioned the German Navy decided their large numbers of torpedo boats weren't going to be very useful and changed their strategy, but there's probably more to this than one sentence. You could infer this was a influence on their use of submarines instead of torpedo boats, for example.
There was a lot of news paper articles about the battle, and a rediculously fictionalized and nationalistic account of the battle was included in a dime novel from 1915. Ive included it in the text. After Texel the german high command wanted nothing to do with the Flanders coast. They refused to send submarines or torpedo boats there for fear of another Texel, and the local commander had to lobby months before anything was sent at all, and even then the Flanders Flottilla had to produce their own torpedo boats until they were found to be practically worthless in combat when the German Navy finally decided to send some large ones as reinforcements.XavierGreen (talk) 23:08, 16 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Hope this helps. Kirk (talk) 15:46, 15 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]