Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Delville Wood

Battle of Delville Wood

I have now completed writing this article - I started working on it after visiting Delville Wood in the summer. Submitted for peer review because I believe that it is no longer a "start class" article. Also, as part of the WWI drive I thought it needed a lot more information, particularly on the German forces involved (as do some other battles ofthe Somme). Farawayman (talk) 16:42, 6 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Redmarkviolinist

Looks quite good reading through it. This would make a great A-class article, possibly a Featured Article. Thanks

The Prose is well written, but if you could break it into a few different paragraphs that would be nice. Done Where feasable and appropriate.

Make sure you capitalize all the words in the titles that need it. Done

Footnotes should go after punctuation marks. Done

Watch out for contractions. Done

Some of the pictures (mainly the ones in the middle of the article on the left) would be more helpful if they were expanded. Done

All your facts are well referenced. Thanks

Very well written! Cheers, ṜedMarkViolinist^{Drop me a line} 18:46, 6 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Abraham, B.S.

More MoS pointers than anything:

Dates should be delinked. Done
Headings should not begin with "The", and only the first word and proper nouns should be capitalised in headings. Done
Endashes are required between date ranges used in the prose, and page ranges used in citations. For example: "14 July - 15 September 1916" --> "14 July – 15 September 1916" Done
Dashes used in the prose should be emdashes. For example: "The Allied objective was no longer to try to break the German Front in a sudden, surprise attack – as the depth of German defences had proven this to be impossible." --> "The Allied objective was no longer to try to break the German Front in a sudden, surprise attack—as the depth of German defences had proven this to be impossible." Done
Images should not be aligned to the left directly under level three headings. For example, the images of the commanders under "The Plan" heading. Done

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:05, 7 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done and Thanks insertions by Farawayman (talk) 20:42, 7 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Anotherclown

Top effort. Only one (minor) point:

the images could have alt text added to them per WP:ALT DoneFarawayman (talk) 20:41, 10 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers. Anotherclown (talk) 22:30, 9 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert

Hi, Farawayman. You have obviously spent a lot of time and effort on this. Well done. I have made a couple of edits, only minor and relating to spaces and dashes etc. I only have two points (only very minor):

I believe that you are accidentally using the endash incorrectly in some places where you should really be using a normal hyphen. The endash is for page ranges, date ranges and to indicate a relationship between places, values etc. So in the case of Major-General, it should just be a hyphen, not an endash. WP:DASH is the policy link. Done....where I assumed the need applied to revert to hyphens. Farawayman (talk) 19:22, 12 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Map 5 is still missing alt text, although all the others have them. DoneFarawayman (talk) 19:17, 12 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Anyway, that is it. Great effort, by the way. I think that this could be an A class article. I have updated the assessment from Start to B, but it would need to go through the ACR to be rated an A (obviously). Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 10:12, 11 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]