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1994 Black Hawk shootdown incident

Humbly submit this article for peer review. The article's subject is the most complex and difficult that I've edited yet and I really appreciate any inputs or suggestions anyone might have. Cla68 (talk) 03:08, 2 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Narson

A quick glance at it and it looks pretty good, the first thing to leep at me is 'civilian from...Kurdistan'. Kurdistan doesn't exist, they can be ethnic kurds from Iraq or Turkey or any of the other places the theoretical Kurdistan would encompass. I imagine it is referring to Kurdish controlled Northern Iraq there. Narson (talk) 11:53, 2 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Might also be good to find a picture of any of the other non-military non-US 'victims'. Narson (talk) 12:06, 2 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thank you for the feedback. I changed "Kurdistan" to "Kurdish community" with a wikilink to "Kurdish people". I haven't been able to find any pictures of the non-US victims. Cla68 (talk) 21:25, 2 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

Very nice, as usual; just a few minor points:

I'd suggest avoiding contractions ("didn't", "weren't", "couldn't", etc.); they're not really well-suited for a formal encyclopedia article, in my opinion.
The positioning of the Commons box causes the two-column footnotes to leave a wide gap along the right margin, since they don't wrap around it properly; I suggest moving it down to the "Further reading" section.

Kirill 03:39, 4 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Done and done. Thank you for taking the time to look at the article. I don't envy you the wiki workload you have at the moment. Cla68 (talk) 05:02, 4 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]