Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Operation Sandstone

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Promoted: AustralianRupert (talk) 09:48, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Operation Sandstone

Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)

A small article on a nuclear test series, but one of the most significant. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:14, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support with comments

File:Enewetak_atomic_detonations.ogg: what is the source for this video?
- It is from the fifth one down in the external links, Nuclear Test Film - Operation Sandstone - Blast Measurement (1945) [sic] I'd like to upload the external links, but they are too large to upload to commons. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:20, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Favourite bit: Hiroshima and Nagasaki have become "atomic tests". Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:20, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:Sandstone_Yoke_001.jpg: source link is dead.
- Repaired. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:20, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a way to avoid repeating "in that they were primarily" in consecutive sentences?
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:20, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"were detonated from a 200-foot (61 m) towers" - one or more towers?
- Multiple. Deleted . Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:20, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Nikkimaria (talk) 05:35, 2 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Comments~~ Support
- The lead is a bit too short, IMO. The outcome of the tests, namely, the decision to mass-produce the Mark 4, definitely needs to be there.
  - Expanded introduction. Crossroads is well-known, but Sandstone is not; yet the latter was more important in many ways. I think this article will answer a lot of questions from someone who reads through the Manhattan Project article and wonders: "what happened next?" Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:22, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I don't know that I like the table in the lead section.
  - Moved down below. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:22, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Everything else looks good to me, keep up the great work! Parsecboy (talk) 12:21, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks for your review! Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:22, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - Looks good to me, moving to support. Parsecboy (talk) 19:03, 10 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support
- No dab links [1] (no action required).
- External links check out [2] (no action required).
- One of the images lacks Alt Text [3] so you might consider adding it for consistency with the rest (suggestion only - not an ACR requirement).
  - Had to fix Template:Infobox Nuclear weapons test. Works okay now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 13:56, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- The Citation Check Tool reveals no errors with reference consolidation (no action required).
- Images are all public domain and seem appropriate to the article (no action required).
- The Earwig Tool doesn't appear to be working at the moment so I was unable to check for copyright violations, although given the author's past contributions I have no reason to believe this would be an issue [4] (no action required).
- "that" seems redundant here: "felt that "we had, to put it bluntly, lousy bombs." (suggestion only) Anotherclown (talk)
  - Okay. Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 13:56, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - AC, I'd prefer the "that", I'll re-insert. - Dank (push to talk) 20:39, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

- - Thanks for your review! Much appreciated! I hope in the new year that I will have more time to review now that the book deadlines are past.Hawkeye7 (talk) 13:36, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Media review Pretty good, only:

File:Sandstone Yoke 001.jpg needs something to substantiate that it's from the US federal government department.
- The US Federal government was the only source of photographs. They were all government personnel on a remote island. There were no passers-by, and nobody was allowed to just take pictures. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:21, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Currently the only evidence we have that this is a photograph from a federal employee of yoke is the filename. I think this video might include the still, but it won't load for me. We need some better evidence. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:37, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

File:Enewetak atomic detonations.ogg needs its description fixing so we can see that a source is in fact provided (almost caught me out).
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:21, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:35, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. Someone at FAC will probably ask you to prosify the list that begins "The objectives of the Sandstone series of tests were to". - Dank (push to talk) 22:28, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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