Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Josef Wurmheller

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Article promoted by Peacemaker67 (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 00:08, 24 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Josef Wurmheller

Nominator(s): MisterBee1966 (talk)

Another German World War II fighter pilot I am nominating this article for A-Class. It covers the major aspects of his life but it is a bit thin on his personal life which I am unable to address further. Nevertheless I think it might qualify for A-Class. Thanks in adavance for your feedback MisterBee1966 (talk) 17:02, 9 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

"at least 18–20": Does this mean one source says 18 and another says 20? Which number seems more believable, and why? - Dank (push to talk) 02:02, 26 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"were four-engined bombers and 56 were against Supermarine Spitfire fighters.": were and were against are non-parallel; that is, if one of these fits grammatically in the sentence, then the other one doesn't.
"8 June 1944 ... 6 June 1944 ... 16 June 1944": It's better not to repeat the year when it's obvious.
Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 15:58, 26 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments: I did a little copy editing. Please check you are happy with my changes. I also have some comments/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 12:23, 6 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"encountered a formation of five Royal Air Force (RAF) Fairey Battle single-engined bombers in the vicinity of Saarbrücken..." Do we know what they were doing there, i.e. "...carrying out a raid on blah" ? If so, I think it would add a little more context to this point
- done MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:43, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
the Phoney War appears to be mentioned in the lead, but not in the body;
- added MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:58, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Squadron Leader Macdonald" ... do we know this person's first name or initial?
- added MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:55, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Macdonald" or "MacDonald"?
- sources are inconclusive MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:55, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"His opponent K9283..." was his opponent the aircraft, or the pilot?
- reworded MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:43, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"...received the Iron Cross 2nd Class...on 19 October 1939" was this specifically for shooting down Macdonald?
- yes, reworded MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:43, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Messerschmitt Bf 109 E-4 (Werknummer 5242—factory number) at approximately 5:10 pm" --> is this level of detail really necessary?
"Wurmheller, whose right foot was plastered in an orthopedic cast..." --> do we know why?
- no, nothing which can be cited, it seems it was due to a domestic accident MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:58, 7 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - I've added my support as most of my comments have been addressed. Well done. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 08:08, 8 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support

Copyedited so pls let me know if any issues, happy with prose otherwise.
Structure and level of detail seem fine.
Fully cited to what appear reliable references, and my quick source review revealed no obvious formatting errors (not sure I'd bother linking Osprey Publishing four times though, if at all since no other publishers are linked).
Image licensing looks okay; I suppose for context you could include a shot or two of the types of aircraft he flew but up to you.

Well done as usual, MB. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:44, 22 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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