Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Battle of Marion

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Not promoted - please nominate only when you have time to respond to issues with the article, ok? :-/ —Ed 17 ^{(Talk / Contribs)} 02:22, 24 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Battle of Marion

Just passed a GA. I'd like to go for A and maybe FA soon. ṜedMarkViolinist^{Drop me a line} 19:18, 21 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - Just a few points I noticed:

The following require a reference/citation:
- "The heavily scaled-down Confederate forces consisted of approximately 1,500 men, under the overall command of Major-General John C. Breckinridge and Brigadier-General Basil Duke."
- "both sides prepared to resume combat the following day."

Done ṜedMarkViolinist^{Drop me a line} 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Citation 10 and 24 are the same; please combine them.

Done ṜedMarkViolinist^{Drop me a line} 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Books listed in "References" should have their ISBN number included.

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:47, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Added most of them. ṜedMarkViolinist^{Drop me a line} 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

And I've done three more. --ROGER DAVIES ^talk 04:50, 25 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support - 1.0x10⁴ times better than when the last ACR happened. (DISCLAIMER: I have done substantial copyediting on this article since early december). Cam ^(Chat) 22:48, 24 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comment You have one dead external link that needs to be located and either removed or replaced. Two disambig links need to located and corrected if possible. TomStar81 (Talk) 23:51, 24 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References comments (this version)
- What makes http://www.bencaudill.com/ a reliable source?
- Refs 9 and 28 can be combined (I think?) using WP:REFNAME.
- Refs 14 and 21 need periods at the end, to be consistent.
- You have web references linked just in the "notes" section (i.e. ref#9) and linked in the References with a shortened footnote (i.e. ref#15). Please be consistent - put all the web stuff in the in-line citations as evidenced by Lexington-class battlecruiser, or put it all below like USS Hawaii (CB-3).
- Otherwise, refs look good and formatted correctly, and Tom got the dead links before me. Cheers, —Ed 17 ^{(Talk / Contribs)} 04:19, 28 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

To be honest, it's a good article but it needs to be expanded before it can get to an A article. This is just my opinion.— Preceding unsigned comment added by Bernstein2291 (talk • contribs)

Conditional Support

I've {{fixbunching}}'d some stuff and added a fact tag for you to cite.
"John C. Breckinridge—former Vice-President of the United States, and also candidate for U.S. President in 1860—the commander..." Rephrase this, maybe something like "John C. Breckinridge, the former Vice-President of the United States and Southern Democratic candidate for President in [[United States Presidential Election, 1860|the 1860 election]]."
"Most of the companies had been transferred to the Army of Northern Virginia to help in the defense of Richmond.[10]" This is confusing, does it mean most of Breckinridge's command had been transferred?
"who stopped just so they could fire a volley into the Union cavalry." Why would they stop "just" to shoot at the enemy? That is what is normally done in war, after all.
"After repelling a final charge," Does this mean another one after the charge just described, or the charge you just mentioned? Please clarify.
The map of Stoneman's advance and the picture of the hill sandwich on my laptop, please move one of them.
"Breckinridge ordered his field officers to inspect the troops and to report back with the condition of his troops." Saying troops too many times in a sentence, perhaps "Breckinridge ordered his field officers to inspect and report back on the condition of his troops."

None of these should be difficult to fix, so please do so and it will, in my opinion, meet the criteria. – Joe Nu tter 19:06, 30 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support with few comments

It would be good if you could get rid of the fact tag placed in the infobox.
The Union forces consisted of about 4,500 men from a variety of different units, including several units which had participated in smaller-scale raids into Southwest Virginia earlier in the conflict. - this needs a ref.
On December 14, the Union regiments began to push Duke's cavalry back toward Abingdon, Virginia. The next day, Stoneman and his cavalry went into camp at Glade Spring, Virginia, which was approximately 13 miles (21 km) west of Marion. - needs ref.
Current ref. number 9 lacks accessdate and other additional information. --Eurocopter (talk) 20:04, 17 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - are these concerns going to be addressed? The last time this article was edited was on January 30th... —Ed 17 ^{(Talk / Contribs)} 20:31, 23 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest that this nomination be closed as unsuccessful, the nominator has not responded in several weeks. Cla68 (talk) 02:17, 24 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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