Wikipedia:WikiProject LGBTQ+ studies/Peer review/Triangle Foundation

Also considering this article for B class and ultimately would like to nominate it for GA class. Varnent

Comment The citations need formatting - I have formatted citation 12 as an example. LuciferMorgan 18:18, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This is looking pretty good so far. A couple of things:

I agree with LuciferMorgan's comment. See WP:CITE.
The lead could be expanded somewhat, to better summarise the article. It should be able to act as a stand-alone summary. See WP:LEAD.
Everything in the lead section should be in the main article, (expanded) and as a result youshouldn't need citations in the lead, because they'll be in the main article.
In the "Community Building Program" it says "our events" which makes it sound a bit like advertising / promo.
Following on from that, statements like "...this program attempts to instill a sense of activism and need for community involvement..." without citations, well how do we know? It sounds like it's written by the organisation.
The four events mentioned in that section could do with being expanded.
I think in general it needs more third party references. Maybe the same ones already being used, but used more often so there aren't as many unsourced statements, especially about goals / intentions.
Maybe a little more about the history, who founded it, the circumstances etc?
The logo needs a Fair use rationale.
I don't know if it would be possible to get any pictures, maybe of the events. That would be a great addition.
I added "American" to the lead sentence. I hope you don't mind. Otherwise it is not immediately obvious to non-Americans where this organisation is. There are too many articles that don't explicitly state that the topic is American, or British or whatever.

Yes that all helps a great deal. I'll be out of town for a couple of weeks. However, I'll be sure to implement those suggestions when I return - thank you! -Varnent 02:19, 4 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]