Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/Bhaṭṭikāvya

Bhaṭṭikāvya

This is my first article for Wikipedia, I would like some help to get it to featured article status. I also intend to contribute many more articles, so need to learn how to do it properly.
The article is based on the intro to my edition and translation of the Bhaṭṭikāvya[1] of which I am the copyright holder. It was written with the approval of the publisher (Clay Sanskrit Library [2]). The published work of the Clay Sanskrit Library is peer-reviewed.
opfallon (talk) 15:12, 6 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Redtigerxyz's comments:

More Citations needed
Please give more emphasis on facts, than opinions
Write about the chief subject of the poem: It writes about Ravana's death, what else, expand, how did he die, any background, after death. Is it covered.
Use Normal English spellings then IAST, WP:Featured Articles (wiki's best work) Ganesha uses Ganesha, NOT Ganeśa as Readers may not be aware of IAST format. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 17:00, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your help Redtigerxyz. I will implement these improvements. The only one I'm doubtful about is the use of IAST. In my opinion it is preferable to use the full diacritics for rendering Sanskrit words, but i will experiment.opfallon (talk) 17:25, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've looked at the Ganesha page and I'm unclear about what principles are being applied with regard to IAST. Some words are given in IAST and others aren't. There are even variant spellings of Ganesh/Ganesha. Should i apply the tag IAST to all Sanskrit words? Should I give an anglicises rendering in the first instance followed by IAST and then subsequently use IAST? opfallon (talk) 17:36, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

IMO, the following will be the most ideal format for key terms: Bhalachandra (IAST: bhālacandra; "Moon on the Forehead"), Ganapatya, (Sanskrit: गाणपत्य; gāṇapatya). I will prefer the way it is done in Ganesha. Render the normal English - anglicises spelling and IAST, then use the anglicises rendering throughout. Though IAST is frequently used in scholarly works, NOT everyone knows it (read "ONLY some know it), NOT in India, NOT in the world. Ganesha or Shiva is more familar than Ganeśa or Śiva, atleast in India. Before wiki (Researching for Hinduism articles), even I didn't know of it. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 04:29, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"one of the boldest experiments in classical literature" is an opinion, rather than a fact. The sentence gives a sense of hyperbole. The lead sentence should be some thing like "Bhaṭṭikāvya is a ____ th century Sanskrit poem/text by Bhatti, (about) _____" In analysis of the poem, one can have statements like ""one of the boldest experiments in classical literature, according to _____". (ref) --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 04:55, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]