Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Gwen Stefani
Currently listed as a good article. I'd like to take this to FAC after I nominated Rich Girl (Gwen Stefani song) (also at peer review). Any comments or suggestions about how to improve the article before then would be much appreciated. Also, it might be nice to have some input on how the No Doubt section looks. Considering it spans 15-20 years, I wasn't sure how to best summarize it, so I tried to do a very brief summary and then add the information that's relevant to Stefani herself. ShadowHalo 00:19, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
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[edit]- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:29, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
- The "Harajuku Girls" mini-section is a bit too trivial, maybe a move to Love Angel Music Baby? Dalejenkins 06:02, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
- I would say that they're a major aspect of Stefani's career, and they've generated quite a bit of controversy. There are already descriptions at Harajuku girl and Love. Angel. Music. Baby.; would it work better if I maybe removed a quote from the section about her being accused of racism? I could also try adding information to the section about how she adopted a "Dior-meets-Japan" look for promoting the album and how Japanese fashion was an influence in her early L.A.M.B. collections. ShadowHalo 23:07, 13 May 2007 (UTC)
- The third paragraph of the lead looks to me like a collection of trivia. Maybe the prose there could become a bit more cohererent.
- "Her brother Eric was the keyboardist for No Doubt, but left the band to pursue a career in animation on The Simpsons.". Maybe these could go to the previous paragraph, where you talk about her family.
- "The album received mixed reviews by critics, who found that it "has a surprisingly moody, lightly autobiographical feel...[but] Stefani isn't convincing as a dissatisfied diva".[43] and called the album ..." Is the punctuation OK here? Is something missing?
- "The couple discovered in 2004 that Rossdale had an illegitimate daughter Daisy with model Pearl Lowe when Rossdale took a paternity test." Do we have any clue (without violating personal life data) if and how this incident influenced the couple's life?
I can't find any major flaws. The article is comprehensive and well-written. Maybe some more attention to the prose when it becomes a bit choppy ("As a child, Stefani's musical interests consisted of musicals such as The Sound of Music and Evita.[6] After making a demo tape for her father, she was encouraged not to take music lessons to train her "loopy, unpredictable" voice.[6] Stefani was on the swim team at Loara High School and graduated in 1987.[10][11] She then attended California State University, Fullerton.[12] Her first job was scrubbing floors at a Dairy Queen, and she once worked at the makeup counter of a department store.[13] Her brother Eric was the keyboardist for No Doubt, but left the band to pursue a career in animation on The Simpsons."), but, in general, I can say that it is a very nice article.--Yannismarou 15:46, 23 May 2007 (UTC)
- I'll try to go over the Early life section again. A bunch of that is stuff that I found and inserted last night, so I think I just need to go over it to smooth out the text and add some better transitioning. Daisy Lowe was born sometime around 1989, so it was several years before Stefani and Rossdale were dating; I've clarified that in the text now. ShadowHalo 01:36, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
- Oops, I missed the last part of the last bullet. I've added some context and information about the couple's reaction and split it off into a separate paragraph. ShadowHalo 09:42, 24 May 2007 (UTC)