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The Chaser's War on Everything

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This recently passed GA status, and I would like to see it go further on to FA. Any suggestions.  SpecialWindler talk (currently in control)  03:40, 4 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Peripitus

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A nice article on a topic that I enjoy. Just a few style comments to start as I have not read the article in depth yet.

  • Multiple wikilinks to the same place (eg: ABC_TV) should usually only be linked in the first instance. 2006 is linked in the lead for some reason.
  • Expand certain abbreviations unless in quotes. didn't -> did not, hadn't -> had not,
  • 'Thank God You're Here' - should this be double quotes ?
  • Reference issues, ref 2 misses mentioning that it's from the Sydney Morning Herald, ref 3 and others should use Template:cite web and note the publisher. Check the rest for consistent formatting.
  • copyediting for redundancy and other things is required (these are examples only - needs better eyes than mine)
  • at the time of 11 pm -> at 11 pm (11pm is not likely to be anything but a time)
  • moved it to the timeslot of Wednesdays at 9 p.m -> moved it to the Wednesday 9 pm timeslot.
  • Broadcast section. "New segments have also been developed" - incorrect tense. have -> had and "also" is redundant as it is implicit in the context.
  • "The move to a prime time position ultimately resulted in an increase in the show's ratings, despite being in direct competition with high performing shows on commercial networks, with ratings close to 1.5 millions viewers each week" is a convoluted construct that needs work. Try
"The move to prime time resulted in a ratings increase, reaching almost 1.5 millions viewers each week. This was despite direct competition against well rated programs on commercial networks."
  • "Due to the popularity of The Chaser rising, largely due to the controversy of the APEC motorcade stunt, many international countries currently broadcast the show." after reading the reference I would tend to write this
"After the controversial APEC motorcade stunt, the show's profile was greatly increased and international broadcasts expanded." Although I'm not convinced that the reference shows the stunt led to the first set of countries broadcasts or just the subsequent interest.
  • "There is a possibility that re-edited versions of the show would be broadcast" -> "Re-edited versions of the show may be broadcast" says the same thing without the redundancy\
  • "On some occasions, other cast members may join them"
  • "Some include Prolix Songwriter" -> Including Prolix Songwriter
  • "A few days later" -> "Days later" again says the same thing and few is too vague to be useful
  • The article seems somewhat unbalanced. While the point of view is fine the creation/writing/broadcast/funding/technology/staffing and other aspects of making the show only get a small look in. The article is primarily about segments and stunts. There are many aspects of making a TV series that are not even mentioned.
  • British/American spelling - User:AndyZ/peerreviewer has told me that there is inconsistency but my spelling is not good enough to find this easily. Probably the issue is with things like offense/offence
  • Lead paragraph 2. Dates should be wikilinked for date preferences to work, the phrase "and has been running since" is unneeded as it is implicit in the context, do not use "is currently airing" as this ages very fast.

- Peripitus (Talk) 11:55, 4 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
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    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  • The script has spotted the following contractions: didn't, Don't, aren't, didn't, hadn't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.
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  • Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, APR t 17:41, 4 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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