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Dolls and Dead Things

Hi, I would like to submit articles on horror themed artists, this is my first one and I would really like it to be reviewed. Thank you

Crusincrooner (talk) 04:22, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

I have sent you a welcome message with some policies and guidelines that you will probably find useful. Right now the most important is the notability guideline, which deals with what is considered notable enough for Wikipedia. I am worried that your article may not be considered notable enough; the artist herself does not have a page, and verifiability is not shown very well because of a lack of reliable sources. Interesting read though. I also tagged a couple minor things. Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:37, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Starbuckt/Emancipator (artist)

I know this article is kind of a stub, but I believe the sources are reliable enough to warrant this at a minimum. Supposedly he was interviewed by Rolling Stone Japan, but I'm having trouble finding that article online. I believe it may have been print only.

Several other Wikipedia articles reference Emancipator (artist), so I believe the stub is warranted and can be expanded as more information becomes available.

Any suggestions?

Starbuckt (talk) 07:47, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

I am not sure if the references you are using qualify as reliable sources. Wikipedia:WikiProject Music would have a much better understanding of that. A couple of general things though:

1. I don't think a link to the artist's Twitter feed is allowed under the external links guidelines
2. Some more general sources, like a newspaper or something, would greatly improve the article and indicate the notability of the artist.
3. Expanding the article a bit with any reliable sources you can find would greatly improve it. Right now you are only at 281 characters of article prose; perhaps increasing it to at least 500 would be preferable.

I hope this helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:59, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the positive feedback! I'll work on finding some more reliable sources and expanding the content of the article. Maybe I can find that Rolling Stone interview somewhere. --Starbuckt (talk) 18:09, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Sounds good. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:23, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Yogafreedom/Venerable_Tenzin_Bagdro

This is my first wiki page, and I would like it to be checked for general acceptability.

Yogafreedom (talk) 11:29, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

It appears to be a copyright violation of this website. Sorry, but Wikipedia does not reproduce copyrighted material. However, please feel free to write another article in your own words; he seems to be notable. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:08, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Alex_mirzac/Alex_Mirzac

a very short and brief article, for people to know how this person is.

Alex mirzac (talk) 11:34, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Hi Alex. Just to let you know, to be shown in article space a subject has to be notable, with verifiable information regarding it published in reliable, third-party sources. Facebook and Blogspot are not considered reliable. Also, writing a page about your self is a common mistake; if you are notable enough for a Wikipedia article, another editor will write one about you. Don't worry though; if you rephrase the information in the first person you can use it as your Userpage. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:17, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Noel 'Razor' Smith

This is my first article, help would be really appreciated, thanks!

7exie (talk) 11:41, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Neat article, just needs some formatting work. You need to add WP:Categories (as specific as possible). Also, for a lot of your statements it isn't clear where the info came from, so you need to make sure statements are footnoted to a WP:Reliable source (not Facebook, blogs, forums); I note you have some non-footnoted Links down in References, perhaps you can footnote those to the specific statements they evidence? Lastly, you footnotes are WP:Bare URLs, so they need to be converted to full WP:Citations. Nice work, just needs some cleanup. MatthewVanitas (talk) 05:12, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

R v Horncastle

R v Horncastle Article about an extraordinarily significant UK legal case, very well covered in specialist publications but little/no mainstream coverage (perhaps because there were no celebrities involved and it concerned the relatively dull/impenetrable subject of hearsay evidence). Comments/improvements/suggestions welcome with a view towards (my first) GAN. Thanks!

Bob House 884 (talk) 15:08, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Hi Bob. Your article seems to be in very good shape; for the kind of review you want, you may want to try the Peer Review process. The good people at WikiProject Law might be able to give more in-depth information. I only see one small problem: External links generally don't go in the body of the text. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:32, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Alright thanks, will do. :) Bob House 884 (talk) 23:46, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Garry Crawford (sociologist)

Garry Crawford is a notable British sociologist and author. This entry needs reviewing. Thanks.

Slenderhooligan (talk) 17:47, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

 Done Reviewed, looks good overall. There were a few overcats I removed, and I added cat "Sports culture" since he seems to cover the topic. You're good to go, just add a WP:WikiProject or two to the Discussion page. Nice work! MatthewVanitas (talk) 13:42, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Displaced1980/St_Woolos_Cemetery

First article, local history article about Cemetery in Newport, Wales.

Seeking general feedback/validation on the page before posting to main site.

Displaced1980 (talk) 17:48, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

Wow, that is a pretty good looking article. I personally think that being the first public cemetery in the UK would qualify as notable, and the sources seem to be reliable. There are however a few minor comments.

1. The statement that it was the first public cemetery should probably have a citation nearby showing that it is true; that is one of your main claims to notability.
2. The Geolocate coordinates may look better if they are a little less intrusive. It breaks up the reader's concentration.
3. Using euphemisms is generally discouraged by the Manual of Style. For example, instead of "fell" you should use "died".
4. You want to avoid Bare URLs in the references and external links. For example, you can write [http://www.newportpast.com/nfs/y50t59/y1854.htm 'Newport First Stop' - 100 Years of News Stories: 1854], which produces 'Newport First Stop' - 100 Years of News Stories: 1854.

I hope this helps, and don't be afraid to nominate your article to the Did You Know? board if you have moved it to article space and improved the citations. You can also contact me; I will gladly list it at the suggestions page. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:46, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

Cheers Crisco, thanks for your time. Will work on your feedback this evening and create it as an article. Displaced1980 (talk) 10:35, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

And cheers to you too for doing such a good job. Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:57, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

The statement that it was the first public cemetery should probably have a citation nearby showing that it is true; that is one of your main claims to notability.

-- Reference added.

The Geolocate coordinates may look better if they are a little less intrusive. It breaks up the reader's concentration.

-- Now done, by making the font smaller. Later, once I've added photos for each landmark/structure, I may move the geotags to the caption box for the photos, as this should be less intrusive.

Using euphemisms is generally discouraged by the Manual of Style. For example, instead of "fell" you should use "died".

-- Corrected.

You want to avoid Bare URLs in the references and external links. For example, you can write 'Newport First Stop' - 100 Years of News Stories: 1854, which produces 'Newport First Stop' - 100 Years of News Stories: 1854.

-- All bare URLS now changed to plain text.

Thanks again. Displaced1980 (talk) 14:58, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

Looks very nice. Just a question though: is St supposed to be without a full-stop? I know back home (Canada) it was always St., but I'm not sure if British English is like that. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:16, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

We do tend to drop the full stop in British English, although we seem to be shifting towards the North American norm of including them for the abbreviation of Saint. I'm Scottish though - some people would say English is my second language.Displaced1980 (talk) 19:48, 16 May 2011 (UTC)

Good to know. Cheers! Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:56, 16 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Jiaofan/JS_Chiao

Hello, here is a brief bio for Prof. JS Chiao (phD 1953, U of Wisconsin at Madsion), a well-known Microbiologist. Each of link of the selected publications has been verified.

Jiaofan (talk) 18:09, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

I have sent you a welcome message with some links to guidelines and policies to help you out; I have also tagged your article to indicate what you need to do to improve it. Among the most important:

1. You should read the notability guidelines for academics to see if JS Chiao is considered notable enough for Wikipedia.
2. Some of your sources may not be reliable enough. Baidu has some user-generated content, so it isn't usually considered reliable.

There are some more minor issues that I will not list here; they are tagged in the article. I hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:23, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

Also, you may want to work on formatting your references and adding categories. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:25, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

Marcelo_Martinez-Ferro

In every site referenced in the article you will be able to find Dr. Ferro's name mentioned (in some just a news article, in IPEG site he appears as the last President of the Group. We will keep adding references and information

Thanks

Jprealini (talk) 20:37, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

I have tagged the article for clean-up, but the most important is the notability of the subject. The General Notability Guidelines require in-depth discussion of a subject to prove its notability. There are more specific guidelines at the notability guidelines for academics. There are more minor problems that I will not discuss here. Don't worry though, they don't take much time. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:32, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

Plum Blossoms in the Snow (A Chinese Folk Song)

I'd like to have my page checked for acceptability. This is basically a duplicate of the same page at the Chinese Wiki which I know is generally frowned upon; so I got a book through my library to get English language sources.

If this page is acceptable I'll also add a link from Huang Tzu which already mentions the song.

3lb33 (talk) 23:48, 14 May 2011 (UTC)

• As far as I know, we actually welcome translations from foreign language Wikipedias as long as the translation can prove notability and is verifiable. For more information you could see [{WP:TRANSLATION|the Translations page]]. As for your article...

1. External links to Youtube are generally frowned upon for copyright reasons. Unless the copyright owner is the one who uploaded the videos to Youtube, you may want to remove those links.
2. We are allowed to use foreign-language sources, so don't be afraid to add information from Mandarin reliable sources. However, as you seem to already know, English sources are preferred, so it would be nice if there were a few more; an online source would help greatly.
3. If you transfer the article to article space, be sure to add some categories so that it is easy to find.

I hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:07, 15 May 2011 (UTC)