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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harbor_Moon

Just looking to have my article reviewed.

69.114.85.233 (talk) 01:03, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think the main thing with your article is that you need to try and use footnotes to display your references correctly. If you need any help with that, please let me know on my talk page, and I will do my best to help. Chevy monte carlo 15:31, 2 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You can also check out Referencing for beginners--SPhilbrick T 15:20, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Kevin Hambly

The article could probably use more content, but for now any feedback on what is already up, the article in general, or the direction the article is going in would be much appreciated.

Captain.nutspike (talk) 03:35, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I don't see any immediate problems. I think the references are good, and really I think the article is of a good length so I don't think anything needs to be done there either. Well done. Chevy monte carlo 15:27, 2 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Neverwinter_(Video_Game)

Looking for constructive feedback to ensure the article is a valuable addition.

Landiien (talk) 04:36, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've made a few minor corrections and improvements but I think overall I think the article is about ready. Nice work! Chevy monte carlo 17:12, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Falaise_Verte/new_article_name_here

Is this text ready to go on Wikipedia ?

Thanks

Falaise Verte (talk) 09:30, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User is blocked. Please resubmit if unblocked.--SPhilbrick T 15:19, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Commsty/Forte_Communications_Style_Profile

This is part of my thesis on people profiling, I noticed MBTI, DISC etc all all on wiki so have included Forte also.

Commsty (talk) 11:50, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In History, you start "Forte was established by CD Morgan III in 1978." Too early for shorthand. Presumably you mean Forté, not Forte, and presumably you are referring to the Forté Profile, or the Forté Communications Style Profile. Use the formal name for the first time here, then if you want a shorthand, put it in parentheses for future use. E.g. "Forté Communications Style Profile(Forté)".
Is "established" the right word?
That first sentence requires a citation.
In the fourth paragraph of History you refer to Likert without explaining it. A wikilink is fine, and that comes later, but the first use should be wikilinked.
None of the references you provide have urls. That is not a requirement for a WP article, but it does make it hard for reviewers and people interested in looking at the underlying references. If there are none, then there are none, but I checked the first one and found it. I added a reference, rather than replacing yours, in case I'm missing something (I guessed at the issue and volume, but I think I got it right.)
The last ten references are just floating, unconnected to anything. Are they in preparation for more to come?--SPhilbrick T 14:50, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zanejobe/SPODDS

Hello, I have fixed the broken links and tried to better demonstrate what the group is and why they perform their research. Thanks, Zane

134.163.255.25 (talk) 18:06, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help. (I see that you have three items in a section called "references". Those are external links. If they are used to support the claims in the article, they must be formed as references.) See also footnotes.--SPhilbrick T 14:19, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This article also received some feed back on the 22nd September. Please click here to view it--Ykraps (talk) 15:44, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hinged expansion joint

Would greatly appreciate any feedback on this new article on hinged expansion joints!

SylvIba (talk) 21:26, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I don't understand the phrase "can rotate in a single plane". I'm not familiar with these items, but it sounds like, if you map the object to three dimensional space, such that the Z axis is parallel to the flow, that distortions can be expressed as a change in Z with no change in X or Y. I may be wrong on that point. But if that's correct, I don't believe one can rotate in a single plane and preserve those constraints. In fact, just the opposite—a rotation in a plane results in a change in X and Y, but not change in Z.
More clarity is needed.
Other than that, decent article; I'll be happy to remove the unreviewed template if you can address the point above.--SPhilbrick T 14:09, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for reviewing my article. - To clarify a bit, with the flow parallel with the Z axis, there is no change in Z. And if there is a change in Y, the joint will rotate on the X asix, thus rotating in a single plane.

I still don't get it. That description means that the the pipe will twist, but not lengthen. I don't see how that is an expansion joint. (I did remove the template).--SPhilbrick T 16:20, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

en.wikipedia.org/wiki/106_Street_Crosstown

R68A B Train (talk) 21:41, 1 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You have no references. Please add some. See Referencing for beginners for help.
You included a nonexistent template {{Manhattan Bus Routes}}; I removed it.--SPhilbrick T 13:54, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]