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Wonderlic Test

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I've listed this article for peer review because my class PSYSC 373 Industrial & Organizational Psychology. We are currently trying to update Wikipedia articles that deal with I-O Psychology for a project. My team is responsible for the Wonderlic Test article, which had previously on mentioned its use in the NFL. We are wanting people to be aware that the Wonderlic Personnel Test had its roots in I-O Psychology and that other professions use the test in order to screen potential employees. We are asking that the editors review are article and provide feedback on how to improve the article

Thank you for your time and consideration, VLord89 (talk) 20:09, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

There are several areas needing copyediting for grammar and clarity (you can try listing it at WP:GOCE/REQ, but be forewarned that it has a several-month backlog); examples include:

• "Some psychologists state that the sole use of intelligence testing for personnel selection most notably were Malcolm James Ree and James A. Earles who claimed" - this is pretty much incomprehensible.
• "developed latter and" - try "developed later and"
• "Personnel tests, are currently being used as a gauge for professional capability within the industrial field. Dealing with the assessment of employees or potential applicants the Wonderlic Test has its primary function within the NFL industry, while there are numerous personnel test such as the IQ or the Mechanical Aptitude Test, the Wonderlic Test is a quick and simple vocational Test for personnel recruitment and selection" - multiple grammatical, etc errors.
• "The tests are divided into four different sections cognitive, skill, personality, and behavioral. Serving as a quantitative and a qualitative test for employers, scores are collected by the employers and are often judged according to their score. Each industry has its own unique average therefore, different standards are required. The scores are predictors of the possible conformity a potential employee has within the field that they are applying" - needs a citation (in general, you need a citation at least for each paragraph, and others wherever something is controversial or using material from a source other than the general one for the paragraph); also needs grammar cleanup.

Other difficulties:

• "general cognitive ability in the areas of math, vocabulary, and reasoning" - it doesn't make sense to be discussing areas for general cognitive ability.
• "In the 1970s Tom Landry, former coach of the Dallas Cowboys, was the first to use the Wonderlic Personnel Test to predict player performance" - was he the former coach at the time?
• "to say the least" is probably not appropriate in tone; ditto "and the like"
• "One person in particular, Robert Sternberg and Richard K. Wagner" - I doubt these two names are for one person
• "While an average football player usually scores around 20 points" - "while" is an awfully weird way to link the two sentences; try deleting it and putting in a semicolon."
• You've got various in-text outside links; those should be replaced with <ref>{{cite web|...}}</ref> - see {{cite web}} for some further info.
• That the US supreme court has ruled against the use of general IQ tests without evidence for each test being valid for the particular job should be brought up (it's a power company vs an employee, I forget the exact case; it was ruled out on the grounds of affirmative action).
• Instead of two {{Main}} uses, try {{Main|article1|article2}}.

Allens (talk | contribs) 23:52, 1 April 2012 (UTC)