Wikipedia:Peer review/Windows NT 3.1/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it's a translation of a German Wikipedia GA and I'd like to get it to that level over here as well. Any help to that would be greatly appreciated.
Thanks, -- Liliana-60 (talk) 15:02, 7 December 2012 (UTC)
JoshuSasori - very brief review:
- I don't like the lead section much. It doesn't summarize the article's contents very well, focusing on some details and omitting the bulk of the contents.
- Some of the text is a bit freakish: On the other side, a new operating system called Unix was created a decade earlier - wow, is it a bad translation or something?
- Here: demonstrate the operating system on COMDEX 1990 - maybe demonstrate at?
- Bill Gates already dominated the market of desktop operating systems with MS-DOS and Windows and hoped to do the same in the networking market with Windows NT - why "Bill Gates" and not Microsoft?
- developed from anew -> developed anew.
- strictly spoken -> strictly speaking
- Most of the article depends on the Zachary reference. Is there another main reference?
- It would be nice to change to using a harvnb style reference template.
- The references would be neater in multicolumn format.
The English needs more work checking details I think. JoshuSasori (talk) 12:54, 28 December 2012 (UTC)