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West Virginia

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I've listed this article for peer review because it was delisted from GA status some time ago, and the to do list hasn't been edited since 2007. The articles last peer review was in 2006, shortly after becoming a GA.

Thanks, Nascar 1996 ^{Contributions / Guestbook} 23:10, 2 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Niagara

General

More inline citations are needed. Generally, every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a citation.

Geography and environment

"The Ohio and Potomac rivers form parts of the boundaries."

Which boundaries in particular?

I reworded it to "The Ohio and Potomac rivers form parts of the state's border; mostly in the north and west. --Nascar 1996 ^{Contributions / Guestbook} 02:38, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You may need to specify the difference between Dfa and Dfb Köppen climate classifications.

Could you tell me what this means? --Nascar 1996 ^{Contributions / Guestbook} 02:43, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Dfa means "hot summer" and Dfb means "warm summer". Niagara ^{Don't give up the ship} 14:48, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Link "hardiness zone"

Done --Nascar 1996 ^{Contributions / Guestbook} 02:43, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Use {{Convert}} for the temperature conversions

Use this where: I am confused. --Nascar 1996 ^{Contributions / Guestbook} 03:29, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In the "Climate" section. 14:48, 7 July 2010 (UTC)

History

How does the fact that "native Americans were burning forests to clear land as early as 100 BCE" relate to West Virginia? Same goes for the paragraph directly following that one.
Can the "History" section be summarized a bit more? It is fairly long.

Demographics

Converting the lists, in the "Religion" section, into prose would a good idea.

Economy

The "Demographics" subsection should be merged into the larger section devoted to demographics.
The is a lot of info on taxes, but not a lot on what West Virginia actually produces. Are there any other big industries?

Transportation

The photo of the toll plaza and New River Gorge Bridge form a "text sandwich". One of the three photos in the section will probably need to go.
Is there any reason why "Interstate" can't be written out?

Important cities and towns

Too listy, needs to be converted to prose

Education

Ditto on the lists

Its needs some work for GA, but think this could also become an FA. Look at Virginia for what an U.S. state FA looks like. Your peer review got me to thinking about cleaning up Pennsylvania for a possible FA. If these comments were useful, consider reviewing an article in the backlog. Niagara ^{Don't give up the ship} 02:09, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]