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Weezer (2001 album)

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I am planning on making the Green Album into a Good Article. However, I don't know what else to do on the article. Hopefully, I can get some helpful comments on improvement. GamerPro64 (talk) 17:21, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thoughts from Seegoon

I'm just going to pick through one thing at a time, as thoughts strike me.

"Following the commercial and critical failure of Pinkerton" – our article on Pinkerton states that although it was deemed a failure at the time, it eventually grew to be pretty well-regarded. I know you come to this later on, but here you could say something about the initially negative critical and commercial reaction to the album.
"He retreated to Harvard, but eventually dropped out to focus on songwriting" – I'd be interested to know what he studied there. Again, just for the sake of context.
"In the Winter of 1997-1998" – I'm not sure you need to capitalise here. Same applies to 'spring' later on. Also, date ranges should be linked by an en dash (–).
"soundtrack entitled "American Girls." – I was under the impression that Wikipedia generally used logical quotation; i.e. the full stop should be outside the quotation marks. I might be wrong here, and you can just stick to Am-En if that's the case.
"Brian Bell worked on his band The Space Twins" – either you drop 'the' completely or de-capitalise it, considering it's not part of their name (according to their Wikipedia page).
"the internet" – I actually think it's normal Wikipedia style to capitalise 'internet'. Weird in my books, but seemingly the done thing.
"The positive response to the Warped Tour performances lend to further shows being scheduled." – 'led to', surely.
"The band eventually decided to hire Ric Ocasek--who had also" – as this is American English, you should replace the double-hyphen with an unspaced em dash (—).
"I set out to design the package exactly how I would want it, and it just turns out that it's very similar to the first album. I'm the same person as I was then, pretty much. I have the same taste so I don't see why it should be different.[44][48]" – I don't think you need two citations, particularly.
"Mystery Science Theater 3000. (Hence the liner note citation "MST3K..." – TV shows should be italicised, per style guides.
"come home with me?"[50]." – you can delete the full stop here.
"debuting overseas at #31 on the UK Top 40[56]," – citation should be after punctuation.
"In two weeks the album had sold 215,000 copies." – in total? Internationally? Could do with some specificity.
"but nobody else does it this [sic] so well" – there's a {{sic}} template.
"Spin placed The Green Album as the 9th best album of 2001." – italics for 'Spin' and you could probably write out 'ninth'.
"an additional bonus track, "I Do," which was" – there is a slight inconsistency regarding commas and quotation marks here. Somewhere earlier on you place a comma outside the quotations (which makes more sense to me) and you need to keep a steady style.
Personnel section – some articles break the listing up into band members and other personnel, using minor headings (a semicolon in wikicode), which is something I like. Some also go as far as using a two-column layout, which isn't always necessary but aesthetically can be pleasing. See Wavering Radiant for what I mean.

That's my nitpicking pretty well done, at least what I've gleaned from a once-over. More generally, there are a couple of things that would have this batted away at FAC, although I think it'd likely breeze through GAC. A Featured Article would absolutely, definitely demand more in regarding to critical reception. You have the sources there, but they haven't really been utilised fully. Likewise, a 'Music' section, featuring reviewers' analysis of the sound and musicological musings would be a nice addition. Quite a lot of work, but certainly the difference between Good and Featured. Anyway, I hope this has been helpful. Good luck with it. Seegoon (talk) 16:24, 7 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]