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WWE Backlash

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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that it is slowly progressing towards featured article status. I believe that it still needs to be improved so helping me and others with advice on where to expand and detail it further would be greatly appreciated. Would love for it to become a FA!

Thanks, Masmarkg (talk) 09:53, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, while this article is a ways from FA yet, it's on a pretty good road to GA. Here are some general issues I noticed:

The references start off well, but get very sporadic later in the article; at least one citation per paragraph is needed.
Address all citation needed tags.
Adding a section on its reception or its intent as a PPV would be beneficial, if you can find that. For example, what were the typical buyrates? Was its main purpose to take what happened at WrestleMania and continue storylines/start new ones? Stuff like this may be hard to find sources for, but would make the article that much better.
There's a lot of deadlinks that need fixing. WWE seems to redirect their site a lot, so finding archive urls may be better.

Here are some specifics as well:

The second paragraph in the lead is really about professional wrestling in general rather than Backlash, so it seems misplaced. The second and third paragraphs should be a summary of the events later in the article.
"Each Backlash event has been held in an indoor arena, with nine events taking place in the United States and one event taking place in Canada." this doesn't seem that important in and of itself, since most PPVs are indoors; i'd just remove it.
"with guest referee as Shane McMahon." with Shane McMahon as guest referee sounds better, or just remove as.
"In addition to the main event, the undercard featured a Boiler Room Brawl between Mankind and Paul Wight," I'm pretty sure he went by Big Show in that match.
"The match was between reigning champion, Triple H, and challenger The Rock with guest referee Shane McMahon." Shane guest ref'd two backlash main events in a row? Just making sure that's right.
"Also Kurt Angle defeated Edge in a singles match." this just seems kinda tacked on. any stipulations to the match? either way, have it mesh with the preceding stuff a bit better.
"Other matches that were scheduled on the event card included a No Holds Barred match between the team of father and son, Vince McMahon and Shane McMahon facing Shawn Michaels and "God". " this is a bit confusing. Was there a wrestler going by God at that time, or is there something else involved there?
Several spots in the 2009 section have periods without a space afterwards.
Not sure if there's a good way around it, but the prose feels rather repetitive throughout the article. It's noting each year's matches so it's naturally going to be like that, but having a copyeditor fine tune the prose at GOCE would be very beneficial.

The article's in pretty decent shape; I wish I had a good article that could be used as a guide, but a PPV summary article seems to be new territory. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:48, 6 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]