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W. S. Gilbert

Advice on structuring the article (it is rather unweildy with chronological organisation) and advice as to use of quotes and other structural elements would be very useful. Vanished user ^talk 05:01, 15 September 2006 (UTC)

Note: Noticed afterwards that it also qualifies for the more specific Biography Peer Review and have thus requested one. It may be better to reply there. Vanished user ^talk 05:13, 15 September 2006 (UTC)

• Lead-in is very short in comparison to overall size of the article, and reworking the in-line citations will also help tremendously to make it FAC (assuming that this is your eventual target). - Mailer Diablo 04:18, 17 September 2006 (UTC)

Going to try and fix the lead-in today Vanished user ^talk 15:52, 17 September 2006 (UTC)

Fixed! In-line citations are still a WIP, though. Vanished user ^talk 11:13, 22 September 2006 (UTC)

In-line citations imporoving.... Vanished user ^talk 19:30, 26 September 2006 (UTC)

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 14:25, 13 October 2006 (UTC)

• P.S. The footnotes can be found here for now. Ruhrfisch 14:57, 13 October 2006 (UTC)

• Quite nice, but (i) I don't see the need for a list of "selected" works when there is already a separate List of W. S. Gilbert dramatic works, (ii) it is rather odd that the whole of his life is in the first section! I would promote some of the 2nd level headings to 1st level, (iii) it seems rather short - surely there is more to say, given the number of good references you have used? -- ALoan (Talk) 14:33, 13 October 2006 (UTC)

I've fixed point i - the list of selected works was, in fact, everything he wrote (!), due to renaming the section but not actually replacing the contents. Point ii... I don't follow, to be honest - it only covers his life up to when he was 31 or so, which is around when he started his career as a playwright. The rest of it continues his history, with the last section covering his later life. Point iii is valid, and it could use an expansion drive - but it's a somewhat slow process as there's only three people really active in the project at moment (that I know of - it may be that there's other people in aspects I'm not as involved with - so we do what we can. Hoping that a push towards FA will pull in more editors. Vanished user ^talk 16:27, 13 October 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. On (ii), what I meant was that pretty much the entire article is under ==Life and career== (from ===Beginnings=== to ===Later years===). On (i), the "selected" bullet-point list is, to my eyes, worse than the original full one - ones worth mentioning surely are already? But, anyway, good luck! -- ALoan (Talk) 16:44, 13 October 2006 (UTC)