Wikipedia:Peer review/University of Illinois Experimental Dairy Farm Historic District/archive1
Looking to go GA, maybe FA one day with this. I have worked recently to expand it and plan some more expansion, I have an article on the round barns hanging out in my user space that will be up soon too. Any comments or edits would be greatly appreciated and responded to with enthusiasm. IvoShandor 10:36, 20 April 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 02:11, 6 May 2007 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
Done See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.[?]
- This one isn't relevant so I marked it off. IvoShandor 15:29, 6 May 2007 (UTC)
- The peer review script doesn't recognize images in infoboxes. Keep up the good work! Ruhrfisch 11:59, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 02:07, 6 May 2007 (UTC)
The article is a very good start and has obviously had a lot of work. Here are more thoughts (from me, not a script). The lead paragraphs will need to be expanded if it is to become FA. It would be good if free photos of the barns (interior or exterior) could be obtained. The map image license is questionable (seems to be IL State Govt work, not free US Govt).
History section: Can you explain the Hatch Act more? Have to make the whole division into three components vs four departments clearer too (confusing on first read). I would not link "state wide extension service" to "University of Illinois system" (they are not the same, are they?). Also needing clarification is the relation of the Department of Dairy Husbandry, the Experiment Station, and the Experimental Dairy Farm. Was EDF a unit of ES under the DoDH? The dates here could use more explanation - administrators in 1888, then 1889, then 1902-1913, then a paragraph with no dates, then the barns were constructed in 1907-1913. Perhaps earlier mention of the barn dates to put them in context? There is also no mention of the use of the barns between their construction and 1960, then nothing to 1994. Is there more detail available here?
Boundaries section and following: can you give the relation of the farm to the University and surrounding town (Champaign-Urbana)? I made some copy edits on the rest of the section. Again pictures would help. There is a fair amount of description of the current state of the site, but little of its use / state in the past. How many cows were there? Was it student run? Who lived in the Manager's House? What was done in the laboratory?
Last thought - several places say essentially "the round barns were influential in promoting round barns on private farms" and there are other redundancies (style of the Manager's House, for example). Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch 02:24, 8 May 2007 (UTC)