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Typhoon Ewiniar (2006)

I think it's pretty well-written, and adequately sourced. The storm history is concise, and I'm in the process of adding nbsp's. Would appreciate any comments. – Chacor 14:21, 15 September 2006 (UTC)

• Perhaps size, the article is shorter than what FAs usually make of. Further expansion of the article's prose may help. - Mailer Diablo 04:16, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
  • Yeah, I thought that might be a problem. With storms it's not always possible to make long articles, depending on what information comes out. Look at it this way - it's certainly longer than Hurricane Irene (2005). :P – Chacor 11:51, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
• Are there any concerns other than length? – Chacor 07:33, 29 September 2006 (UTC)

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• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
• Per WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km², and pounds -> lb.
• Per WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
  • While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 10 additive terms, a bit too much.
  • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
• Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 14:26, 13 October 2006 (UTC)

• P.S. The footnotes can be found here for now. Ruhrfisch 14:58, 13 October 2006 (UTC)