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Tropical cyclone scales

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I've listed this article for peer review because, I could do with some feedback about what needs to be done for this article to achieve FA status. Thanks, Jason Rees (talk) 07:26, 19 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Doing...

I see a red link, and a number of awkward grammatical structures of the form "between to the east of longitude 45°E and to the west of longitude 100°E", where I suspect "between longitudes 40°E and 100°E" would read better. - Denimadept (talk) 21:03, 27 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Redlinks are allowed. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 21:12, 27 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I admit that I'm new to this peer-review thing. - Denimadept (talk) 21:16, 27 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

So am i and you seem to be doing a good job :) Jason Rees (talk) 21:28, 27 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I saw this was archived without many comments, so I reopened the PR and here are some more suggestions for improvement.

The {{convert}} template might be useful for the various units - if it is not used, then the MOS says a non-breaking space " " should be added between numbers and units, so "50 mph"

1) Its not usefull to use convert templates per this FAC - I will double check the nbsp; later.Jason Rees (talk) 20:58, 12 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If the official figures are limited to 5 km/h increments (I think that is what is meant) then there should be some sort of note mentioning this. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 19:49, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Avoid WP:OVERLINKing - for example the Saffir-Simpson scale is linked twice in just the lead. Usually things are linked once each in the lead, infobox, and first time in the body of the article.
There are some places that could provide more context to the reader - for example although Reunion is part of France, it is in the Indian Ocean (not Europe) so in the lead In the Southern Hemisphere, the Météo-France forecast center on La Reunion in France... is a bit misleading for those unfamiliar with Reunion. Perhaps something like In the Southern Hemisphere, the French Météo-France forecast center on La Reunion in the Indian Ocean... might be clearer?
I would also identify the National Weather Service centers as such (or as branches of the US government) when first mentioning the National Hurricane Center and the other one
The headers are all by oceanic basin except for the last (Australia) - is there a name for this part of the ocean that could be used as the header here?

I feel its better to use Australia rather than saying the Southeast Indian Ocean and Southern Pacific Ocean.

OK, thanks Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 19:49, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Spell out abbreviations on first use followed by the abbreviation in parentheses - so as one example However if it forms to the north of 10°S and between 90°E to 125°E the low is labeled as a Tropical Depression by the Tropical Cyclone Warning Center (TCWC) in Jakarta, Indonesia.[18]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch poeer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:36, 12 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ok thanks - Im going to work through these bits & pieces bit by bit.Jason Rees (talk) 20:58, 12 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]