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I've listed this article for peer review because the article passed the GA nom and is available for FA, will list more sources (Mostly from ReliefWeb) after seen problems are fixed.

Thanks, 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 01:00, 26 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Copying from your talk page:

  • To get the article to FA, you'll probably have to expand the meteorological history to an additional paragraph, as that's still on the short side. Use more JTWC advisories. Find out what spawned it in the first place. Include more about why the storm moved the way that it did. Also, its path through the Philippines could use more detail.  Done
  • Some of the wording is still clunky, like "On December 18, NASA said that the storm was about 23 miles per hour (37 km/h) and had a rainfall rate of 192.786 millimetres (7.5900 in) per hour." I'm not sure what this is adding.  Done
  • I always felt like there could be more detail. Maybe having a section for all of the Philippines, and then a more thorough account island-by-island? For example, there's nothing about Palawan. I would start with a paragraph for Samar, then one for the Visayas, then one for Palawan.
  • There are also practically no journal articles, and there are few local sources.  Done
  • Your citations are going to be an issue, as they're not as clean and proper as it could be. Capitalization should be consistent. Make sure every reference has a publisher, as a lot are missing.
  • Expand on Malaysia/Brunei impacts. It's only one sentence right now.  Done
Expanded, how to link a PDF? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 02:07, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Which pdf do you want to link? Typically, use either cite web or cite report. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:27, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Considering Tembin was just a few days later, the aftermath doesn't really mention anything about rebuilding. There should probably be something about that.  Done
What do you mean by this? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 02:00, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Was there any rebuilding after the storm? And did the passage of Tembin affect the rebuilding at all? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:27, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I added more information for rebuilding, I don't have any information about Tembin affecting the rebuilding though. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:44, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:28, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hope these make sense. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:49, 26 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

For the island-to-island, can It be by region instead? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:43, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That works. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:55, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
How do you want the layout to be? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:23, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Hurricanehink: Pinging. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 03:45, 12 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Problem #1

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What do you want to include in the additional paragraph? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 06:43, 31 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think all parts of the met history can be fleshed out more. The first paragraph should go more into its origins: what produced the area of convection in the first place? And then more into the conditions that allowed it to develop or not. The second paragraph could cover its development, peak intensity, and landfalls in the Philippines. The Philippine landfalls are all rushed into one sentence, but I think that can be expanded more. Go into the storm's structure as it developed, approached, and moved over land. The final paragraph should cover the storm's reintensification into a tropical storm. That was one of the issues you kept having in the GA nomination, but I didn't want that to hold it up from being a good article. Instead, I'll say again here that there should be more on the storm after the Philippines. Discuss the conditions in the South China Sea, its movement, how and why the convection increased. Was the reintensification expected or not? Why did it turn back to the southeast at the end of its duration? There is a lot more that can be added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:21, 31 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You said in the GA review that the first paragraph (now the second) should be ended after the storm was internationally named. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 01:48, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Expanded met history, can you check? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 01:56, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What was the origins of the storm? The answer is a near-equatorial trough, which you can cite to the Bureau of Meteorology here. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:27, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • What produced the area of convection in the first place?
  • Added more information about this.
  • Not really. Where did the storm come from in the first place? Was it a monsoon trough? A tropical wave? An upper-level low? Also you introduced an error. The JTWC did not classify it as a tropical depression on November 10th - they didn't start issuing warnings til the 13th, per the ATCR. Further, although the JMA may have said it was a depression on the 11th, their best track has it forming on the 13th. The wording does not reflect the official sources. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • What allowed it to develop or not? What were the developmental conditions, such as wind shear, water temperature, or other stuff?
  • " The following day, the storm started moving towards Samar Island, going back and forth over the following days. " - be more specific.
  • Added more information.
  • Yea, but it's still clunky. "The following day, the storm started moving towards Samar Island, going back and forth over the following days in a circle-like manner, later moving towards Northern Samar." - you mention twice its movement toward Samar. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:36, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Maybe list each Philippine landfall one sentence at a time, while also discussing the track a bit? The Philippine landfalls are still rushed into one sentence. Go into the storm's structure as it developed, approached, and moved over land. The final paragraph should cover the storm's reintensification into a tropical storm.
  • Still needs more for the ending, once it got into the South China Sea up to its dissipation. There should be more. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:03, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Going to split met history into 4 paragraphs - 1st will end in the Philippine naming, 2nd will end in the international naming, 3rd will end before the landfalls, and 4th will end when dissipated. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 02:05, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    For the issues, I'm going to try to add all the prognostic reasonings (32 of them) to the article, since they are mostly text and can describe the storm well. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:47, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Just going to not add those sources and expand reasoning. By the way, I think I fixed all the problems, though I can't find any information post-dissipation. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:24, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Problem #2

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What makes you think the wording is "clunky"? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:28, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Several parts make me wonder if the information is accurate, like the formation date, or why it weakened/strengthened. Also, "better convection" should be explained how it was "better". Was the convection stronger? More widespread? More organized? Here's another example of clunky wording:
  • "On December 16. the storm weakened even more, turning into a tropical depression, later making landfalls in the northern part of Samar on December 16, making landfall on all three provinces." The italicized part is either redundant or confusing. Did it hit Northern Samar, and Western Samar, and Eastern Samar? I don't think it did, so this might be incorrect info. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The formation date seems accurate to me. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 10:57, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The infobox says November 13th, which is backed up by the JMA BT and IBTRACS. The met history says that it formed on November 10, which is incorrect. The JTWC did not classify it as a tropical depression on the 10th. Please correct the false information. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:54, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 01:34, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:04, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Another thing that's clunky is the unit abbreviation. The first time the unit is mentioned in the article (like miles or whatever), it should be spelled out, but every later usage should be abbreviated. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:07, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Not done, I see a few instances of "kilometres" or "kilometres per hour" being spelled out. I also see an instance of "east-northwest", whatever that direction is. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:54, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Probably done? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:37, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You still have "500 kilometres (310 mi)". ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:52, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Again? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:38, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You still have this sentence - "On December 18, NASA said that the storm was about 23 miles per hour (37 kilometres per hour) and had a rainfall rate of 192.786 millimetres (7.5900 in) per hour." That spells out the units unnecessarily. Also, I have no idea what this sentence means. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:55, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Re-worded it. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:23, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Also clunky is that three refs are in all caps. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:08, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You should explain what " Public Storm Warning Signal #2" is. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:11, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Could you add a source for that information? I like that it's a note, good choice doing that though. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:54, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Per the DYK review, you need sources for all of the images.

Do all of these issues make sense, TheNuggeteer (talk · contribs)? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:02, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wait, you need sources for all the images? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 10:55, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Correct. How else can we tell the image license for the image? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:54, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
How exactly? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:46, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Add a source for every image in the article. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:55, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Added a source for everything except the "Own work" ones. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:47, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Did the problems you pointed out.. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:25, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Problem #5

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Can you be more specific about my citation issues? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 11:58, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

There is still one citation that is in all caps. You're also missing publishers for a lot of references. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:54, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I don't feel like it's required to have publishers. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:45, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It is required. You should add the publishers for all of the citations that are missing them. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:52, 9 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Is it okay to not include a publisher in sources which already include the websites? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:34, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Check out ref 19, for example, which doesn't have a publisher. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:55, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done, anything else? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:43, 11 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Updated to do

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  • here is a source from PAGASA that should help. It lists each landfall in the Philippines, so you don't have to use ref 16 (IBTRACS) which only lists two landfalls.
  • Where is the reference for the landfall in the Spratly Islands? IBTRACS does not have that. ♫ Hurricanehink (

talk) 17:24, 15 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • For any reference with ReliefWeb, that should not be listed as publisher. In the coding, enter it as at=ReliefWeb - that is because ReliefWeb is a website organizing all of the information, but it's not a publisher like a news publisher.
  • Some parts are in need of a copyedit still, due to stuff you've added that makes it more confusing:
  • "Just before the formation, a Near-equatorial trough was spotted." - this has no context, and needs to be integrated into the narrative better. I suggest something like "The origins of Kai-tak were from a near-equatorial trough."
  • " On December 10, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) began to monitor a low-pressure area located about 130 kilometer (80 miles) to the east of Palau after reports of warm seas and favorable environment, though it was offset by moderate vertical wind shear." - first unit (kilometres) should be plural. Also, the wording suggests that the JTWC was offset by wind shear. You need to be careful how you're presenting the info. They didn't monitor the system "after report of warm seas and favorable environment". They monitored the system because it was expected to become a tropical cyclone by computer models. The low happened to be in an area of warm seas and poleward outflow, and that is partly why the computer models thought it would intensify. But those are two different ideas. The JTWC monitoring the system, and then the reason why the agency expected development.
  • I'm just going to point out what's there and why it doesn't work - " On December 10, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) began to monitor a low-pressure area located about 130 kilometers (80 miles) to the east of Palau, growing with of warm seas and favorable environment." The way it's written implies that the JTWC grew, since the JTWC is the subject of the sentence. But then the last part "growing with of warm seas" - I think I know what you mean here, but the writing is confusing and clunky. Don't remove though, please rewrite. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:36, 18 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Changed. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:32, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Three hours later, the JMA upgraded the system to a tropical storm after reports of better organization and deep banding" - this is cited to JTWC, so that's not a good way to cite this information. Again, you rely on "reports" here, but that's not exactly accurate. You can keep the same JTWC ref and say "the JMA upgraded the depression to a tropical storm after an improvement in rainbands."
  • " the storm started expanding, with expanded " - redundant wording

"*"At approximately 12:00 UTC, Kai-tak reached its peak intensity, with 75 kilometres per hour (45 miles per hour) winds estimated by the JMA after reports of warm waters." - again, this is cited to the JTWC, but it's a JMA-specific piece of information. The ref needs to reflect that.

  • "A few hours later, the storm started moving towards Samar Island, then went back east. Going back and forth over the following days in a circle-like manner, eventually moving towards Northern Samar.[16] A few more hours later, all the convection was spotted to the west of the low-level circulation center, the storm also had unfavorable wind shear, strong poleward outflow, and weak equatorward outflow." - this is confusing and probably needs to be rewritten. The "A few hours later" shouldn't be used twice in such a short amount of time. Also, you should be clearer about the path and movement, that was an issue from the GAN. In fact, much of the third paragraph of the met history seems confusing and redundant. You mention the ridges again (you mentioned them prior), and the shear, and the warm waters.
  • Yea, you use "hours later" a few times, but storms rarely change that much in the span of a few hours. You twice mention the storm's movement toward Samar, while also mentioning that the storm didn't much, so it's confusing. Also, the last part is a bit confusing since you mention a few contradictory aspects.
"Later, all the convection was spotted to the west of the low-level circulation center, the storm also had unfavorable wind shear, strong poleward outflow, and weak equatorward outflow, though the system still was expected to intensify."
  • So the "had unfavorable wind shear" is also confusing. The second MH paragraph mentioned low wind shear, the first one mentioned moderate wind shear, and the third paragraph mentions "strong wind shear", "unfavorable wind shear", "reports of strong wind shear", and "an easterly vertical wind shear". I'm left confused by you mentioning it so often without mentioning its influence on the storm. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:36, 18 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Probably fixed the issues. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:36, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • There are still several instances of "hours later", and in that third paragraph specifically, it focuses on the storm's hourly movement. It still spends a lot of words by twice mentioning the movement toward Samar. You also use the term "later" a lot, without it always making sense, like when you say "The storm later remained stationary after subtropical ridges were spotted to the north and northeast." This appears to have been mentioned already when you mentioned the ridges in paragraph two, so was this anything different? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:15, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    The remaining instances are valid, since they're sourced by the MT source archives. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 08:45, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A few hours later, a fast-developing cold center was spotted obscuring the low-level circulation center." - I have no idea what this means
  • "Public Storm Warning Signal #2 indicates that the storm has a wind speed of 61 to 120 km per hour" - this note needs mph
  • "On December 19, All the Local Government Units in Mimaropa were placed on Red Alert. Suspension of classes in the Bicol Region were also declared in all six levels." - the first sentence occurred after the storm moved through the Philippines, so I'm not sure what this is doing here. Is Red Alert lower than PSWS1/2? Also, the classes being suspended seems to have happened on the 15th, not 19th.
  • "The storm also made landfall in the town of San Policarpo, Eastern Samar" - this appears in the impact, but you already mention landfalls in the MH
  • "On December 14 at approximately 06:00 UTC,[d] the storm made landfall over the province of Eastern Samar. Heavy rainfall was also predicted from a 400 km (250 mi) standpoint." - this is not impact. Again, landfalls were already covered in the MH, and the predictions belong more in preparations.
  • "From which classrooms took a large part of the 18 evacuation centers, holding 3,157 individuals" - the grammar is weird, and also, evacuations are typically in preparations
  • "The storm created the suspension of classes in 14 provinces." - similar as above. You already mentioned schools being suspended in preparations.
  • "On December 18, NASA said that the storm had wind speeds of 23 miles per hour (37 kilometres per hour) and had a rainfall rate of 192.786 mm (7.5900 in) per hour." - still no idea what this means
  • "As a response, Acting Minister of Home Affairs Dato Seri Setia Awang Haji Ali bin Haji Apong and Minister of Culture Dato Paduka Seri Haji Awang Halbi bin Haji Mohd Yussof visited flood affected areas." - this is a lot of words to say that officials visited flood areas, which doesn't really say much. Not to mention, their long names makes it seem so much more confusing than it actually is.
  • The attack was controversial, with alleged "human rights violations". - who alleged this quote?
  • The International section of the aftermath has too many quotes that don't add much.

That's my thoughts on the article for now. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:33, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

So, the former is invalid now? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:16, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yea I'm summarizing everything in one small list, unless there was anything you didn't do yet. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:19, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
For the red alert one, I researched and the only form of information I saw were people stating about some "red alerts" happening in the Philippines, which mean that it's a normal alert, which anybody can use. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:46, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved all the issues (probably). 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:54, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "House Representative Yedda Marie Romualdez passed a bill creating a national agency focusing on disaster response mainly because of the storm." - the ref doesn't say that the bill passed, just that Romualdez tried getting the bill passed. Did anything come of this? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:24, 15 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I noticed you added in Philippine local time. You should add a note the first time you mention the time (whether UTC or local time). Be sure to spell out the acronym and indicate the difference between UTC and local time.
  • "This means that strong winds of up to 60 kph are expected within 36 hours." - needs converting
  • I noticed your currency isn't consistent in the article. If you're going to have Philippine and the US currencies, then you need to have US$ for the US part. Right now it says "US100 thousand", with no dollar sign. It's minor, but those are the things that are still "wrong" with the article.
  • Small note, but when you have things like "10,000 kits", it sounds like it's exactly 10,000, but that is such a round number, I have to ask, is it exactly 10,000, or "about 10,000"?
  • What PAGASA name replaced Urduja? You mention Kai-tak's replacement name.
I only see unsourced statements that Uwan replaced the name Urduja. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 08:36, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Could you fix the reference title for ref 70? It is listed as "PAGASA", but that's not the title. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:10, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done with both. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:52, 4 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I see you also switch back and forth between calling it "PAGASA" or "the PAGASA". I don't think "the" is needed, but you need to link to PAGASA somewhere and spell it out. You also don't link to JMA or JTWC

♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:15, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

 Done 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:52, 4 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Addressed. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 23:25, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What part? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:07, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
All. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 08:22, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I replied to three parts that weren't done, and added notes about the images below. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:10, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Image check
  • One last check of the images, since that was identified elsewhere and I don't believe you addressed it. There is no source for the image saying "The track of Kai-tak and Tembin in the Philippines with the affected provinces", so I wonder if it's needed.
  • Is the PAGASA warning needed? It is just a lot of text, but doesn't provide anything all that new or interesting.
  • Is the last JTWC warning map needed? What does it provide to the reader that the track map doesn't already provide?
  • File:Kai-tak imerg 13-18 december 2017 animated.gif and File:Analysis of Tropical Storm Kai-Tak.jpg, which are the rainfall maps, have the wrong image tag. I don't believe creative commons is correct.
@Hurricanehink: Pinging 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 00:36, 5 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You uploaded the images as creative commons, but they should have the NASA copyright tag. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:13, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:00, 11 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What stuff is still not finished? 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 12:00, 11 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "House Representative Yedda Marie Romualdez passed a bill to create a national agency focusing on disaster response mainly because of the storm, though the bill was reiterated." - this is not backed up by the source. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:02, 11 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

<--And before that it said "House Representative Yedda Marie Romualdez passed a bill to create a national agency". She didn't pass the bill, that's my point. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:22, 14 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

So this is one aspect that needs to be fixed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 21:30, 14 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed to "created". 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 03:58, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "One port in Metro Manila was affected, nine ports in Eastern Visayas was affected, 11 ports in the Bicol region were affected, seven ports in Western Visayas were affected, five ports in Calabarzon were affected, and three ports in South Visayas were affected." - this feels like a list, and it's not the best written. Also, were the ports closed, or just affected?
  • " In a report by the DSWD, there were reported power outages in the provinces of Romblon and Marinduque." - were these the only power outages in the country? Or were these the same as "Power lines in 39 settlements toppled and some bridges fell to the ground."? Similar bits of information (like power) should be placed together. Similar for crop damage.
  • "The storm later flooded some parts of the Philippines and caused some landslides, with 23 people dying in the sole province of Biliran,[48] which included a landslide killing 27 people in the Naval barangay of Lucso-on." - how can 27 deaths occur when there were only 23 deaths in the province?
  • Random question, but were any schools or other buildings damaged? You mention a lot of houses damaged, and crops, and power outages, but storms also affect other types of infrastructure.
Oop–fixed. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:24, 14 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The lead could be expanded a bit more.

♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:02, 11 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Expanded lead. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 00:57, 12 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Preparations were little, as the government only monitored the storm." - is that really accurate? There were shelters opened, and classes closed. I'd count them as preparations. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:36, 12 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:27, 12 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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