Wikipedia:Peer review/Tropical Storm Allison/archive1
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I've been working on this for the last month, and want to get some extra eyes to make sure I didn't do anything terribly stupid, which has happened in the past. In fact, if you see any stray ndash;'s, please change it to nbsp;'s, as I just made the idiotic mistake of mixing the two up. Any suggestions? Hurricanehink (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2006 (UTC)
- I have a couple of things to say. In the intro, do you think you could include more of the storm history and a tad less of the aftermath, as the aftermath isn't normally included in the intro. Also, you don't really need to do this, but I would like to see a pic of Subtropical Storm Allison over the Gulf Stream. In addition, can the death toll chart have the deaths divided into the counties, or is there not enough info to do so? And if there's a damage photo for the southeast US (I'll try to look for one), then we could move the rainfall totals up to the top of the impact section, to the lect of the casualties chart. Plus, isn't the aftermath supposed to be separate from the impact with == ==, not === ===? Finally, can a retirement subsection be created under the aftermath? I know when I've done that, it has occasionally be reverted. I hope this helps a lot. íslenska hurikein #12(samtal) 11:49, 15 June 2006 (UTC)
- Got the storm history. Normally the aftermath isn't included, but because the 2nd paragraph was getting redundant (really, how many times can you say the flooding caused damage), I made a third paragraph for the aftermath. I found a pic of Allison over the Gulf Stream, but it isn't particularly impressive of the storm, nor would there be a place for the pic. Ugh, I hate the death toll charts divided into counties. I just don't think it's that important. The main information is that it killed 23 in Texas, 1 in Louisiana, etc. A few times I mentioned the location, but it makes the table unnecessarily big. I couldn't find any damage pics from Mississippi through the Carolinas, but thanks for looking. If you do find one, then, the rainfall pic would be in a much better place. I got the Aftermath, thanks for the catch. There's no need for a small stub subsection that is only two sentences long. However, if someone expands that to include other information, then a sub-section could be warrented, but probably not. Thanks for the suggestions. Hurricanehink (talk) 13:08, 15 June 2006 (UTC)
- Unnecessary date links in this article can be fixed quickly: simply copy the entire contents of User:Bobblewik/monobook.js to your own monobook. Then follow the instructions in your monobook to clear the cache (i.e. press Ctrl-Shift-R in Firefox, or Ctrl-F5 in IE) before it will work. This will give you a 'Dates' tab to press in edit mode. Hope that helps. bobblewik 18:50, 15 June 2006 (UTC)
- What's wrong with the dates? Hurricanehink (talk) 20:56, 15 June 2006 (UTC)
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- Thanks, Andy t 22:09, 15 June 2006 (UTC)