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Treehouse of Horror VI

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to improve this article for Featured status, as with Treehouse of Horror V. I think this would be a good simpsons article. I want anyone to help improve this article here.

Thanks, Greg Jones II 14:23, 27 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Wackymacs

Write a lead which fully summarzies the article. One sentence is not good enough. It should be at least one paragraph. See WP:LEAD
Don't use in-line HTML links (they appear as [1] and so on in the article) - Format these properly as citations. See Wikipedia:Citing sources and Wikipedia:Citation templates.
Most of this article is unreferenced - every paragraph needs at least one footnote, but usually more.
Convert Cultural references section to prose. Lists are frowned upon for one major reason: They ruin the flow of the context. Using lists in this way is incorrect usage. Please see Wikipedia:Lists for correct usage.
Awards section is too short - consider placing it elsewhere so it doesn't look all alone.
Similarly, the Opening sequence section is too short.
"Math equations" is a troubling section - very trivial information, and none of it is referenced.
Consider adding a spoiler template to the start of the Plot section.
"This segment is a parody of Nightmare on Elm Street." - Consider using past tense here. Try "This segment was a parody of Nightmare on Elm Street." instead.
Please get a copy-editor to go through the text. See Wikipedia:Peer_review/volunteers#General_copyediting for a list of people who may be able to help you.
Please see User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a for help with satisfying FA Criteria 1a, which concerns quality of writing.
It is vital you pay attention to Wikipedia:Featured article criteria if you want this to become featured.
Once you have done all of this, submit to WP:GA instead of WP:FA at first - a GA reviewer might give you even more feedback. GA is the second step to featured article status after a peer review.

Hope this helps. — Wackymacs (talk) 19:07, 30 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comment: A model article is useful to follow for ideas on structure, citations, style, etc. There are 25 Simpsons FA's at Category:FA-Class The Simpsons articles including an FA on the whole Treehouse of Horror series, and 83 GA's at Category:GA-Class The Simpsons articles, included Treehouse of Horror episodes III, V, VII and VIII. I would look at these for ideas. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:35, 30 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]