Wikipedia:Peer review/Trapped in the Closet (South Park)/archive1
I've done some serious changes to the article lately, but it still need some work to get a good article status, what do you think? Michaelas10 (T|C) 16:51, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
Lead needs work regarding this as the episode that got scientologists angry. Wiki-newbie 17:00, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
- Done. Michaelas10 (T|C) 17:13, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
Two Part Review, Part one, an in depth report on the GA review, and then a comparison to the Featured article Criteria:
GA review:
- Pass; Lead section could still be improved and betterr cited
- Solid Pass; problems here
- Solid Pass
- Weak Pass; would have appreciated to see more references
- Stable; No problems whatsoever
- Pass, plenty of images
FA Criteria:
- A) No, this will come with time
B) Yes, this was what most impressive in the Ga review
C) BIG GAPING HOLE, when the prose is re-written to be improved, this will be an evident flaw
D) For FA standards, this should be improved
E) Yes, the article is stable
- A) again, this needs to be improved
B) Yes
C) Yes
- Yes
- No Way; needs more info
Other Comments:
- Divide the headers into sub sections
- MORE INFORMATION PLEASE!!! This article has 5 Sections, of which only 2 are actually part of the article.
- Even of those 2 sections, only one of them is without a spoiler tag
- This is far, far, far away from FA status
--Wikipedia's False Prophet holla at me Improve Me 18:10, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
- I'm not sure what section should I write, sections like "trivia", "quotes" and "crew" would make the article listy and non-comprehensive, while a "response" section would be very difficult to write as the most of it is already included in the lead. What should I do? Michaelas10 (T|C) 17:41, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
- I poked around and found This, which tells you how to structure a TV show article. Hope it Helps, Wikipedia's False Prophet holla at me Improve Me 00:03, 20 October 2006 (UTC)
- I'm sorry, it's for television shows, not episodes. The television episodes WikiProject does give ideas for extra sections but I can't make both of them due to lack of online information and lack of examples. Michaelas10 (T|C) 10:54, 20 October 2006 (UTC)
- Sorry, I'm not that into TV articles, but here's the guide the article to follow, Wikipedia:WikiProject_Television_episodes#Structure_of_an_episode_article
- As I already said, I can't make both of the extra sections due to lack of online information and lack of examples. Michaelas10 (T|C) 15:20, 20 October 2006 (UTC)
- Sorry then, If you can't meet the wikiproject standards, there's no hope of it being an FA. The article lacks actual content, and I am debating if wether to take your commen seriously and ask for a GA review because when the topic is to narrow to be a FA, the standards are stricter. This isn't ment to be rude, but it's fact. Wikipedia's False Prophet holla at me Improve Me 02:12, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
- I don't see any problem, they did say 'Omit if none exists.' Michaelas10 (T|C) 08:57, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
- There's a HUGE PROBLEM
- I didn't find any sources for a production details section and the episode doesn't have much of significance to the series, there is no major plot change or anything like that. Michaelas10 (T|C) 20:49, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Also, the second paragraph in the intro should be cited, but adding the template causes the paragraphs to run together. What I am saying is there's no chance it could be a FA unless you add information. Wikipedia's False Prophet holla at me Improve Me 20:40, 21 October 2006 (UTC)