Wikipedia:Peer review/Trans fat/archive1
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I am hoping for peer review against the featured article criteria and general review of the whole article by any editor. I've been working on the article for a while with a few other editors, but I'm hoping to get more opinions about the article. I am thinking to self-nominate it for FA status depending on how the review goes. It's my first PR and FAC, and my goal is to respond positively... please be gentle! -- cmhTC 04:42, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
I seem to remember trans fat being voluntarily disclosed on many labels prior to 2006. Am I wrong? Glenn4pr 09:55, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks for that feedback. I have added to the article that voluntary compliance was allowed from the date of publication of the FDA rule. -- cmhTC 15:58, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 14:47, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
- Overall I think this is an excellent article. Nice work! I have a few suggestions:
- There are a number of inline citations throughout the document that precede punctuation, and should instead follow the punctuation. (C.f. Wp:citations#Footnotes) Some examples:
- "...5% of total fat[4]."
- "...benefit to human health"[1],"
- "..."good" cholesterol) [2];"
- "...nutritionally adequate diet" [8]."
- "...same negative effects [9]."
- &c.
- "Done' -- cmhTC 23:27, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
- The first use of units such as kPa, psi and °C should be linked to the appropriate article.
- "Done' -- cmhTC 23:35, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
- "Blended with unhydrogenated liquid soybean oil, the high pressure processed oil produced margarine containing 5 to 6% trans fat which could qualify for a label of zero grams of trans fat.[18]" Is this because the resulting net weight in the product is below 0.5 grams? I only discovered the reason after reading further. Perhaps this could be clarified?
- Did this the other day -- cmhTC 17:50, 25 November 2006 (UTC)
- The first use of coronary heart disease should be linked, rather than the second use.
- Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- ...the amount a cell-signalling..." is missing an "of".
- Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- The abbreviations LDL/HDL should be written out on their first use, rather than assuming the reader is familiar with the terms.
- There are a number of inline citations throughout the document that precede punctuation, and should instead follow the punctuation. (C.f. Wp:citations#Footnotes) Some examples:
- I'd go ahead and submit this for GA status right away. It looks ready. Thank you! — RJH (talk) 16:05, 10 November 2006 (UTC)