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Tragic Kingdom

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I've listed this article for peer review because User:Tezkag72 and I would like to make it a featured article. We've worked on it to get it to good article status. Basically, we'd like to know what stands between it and a featured article so we can make further improvements.

Thanks, _{Escape Artist Swyer} ^Talk _{Contributions} 14:26, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Basically, Escape Artist Swyer and I are trying to get Tragic Kingdom to FA status, after which we will get Everything in Time and Boom Box to GA, so we can make everyone's work on the other No Doubt albums worthwhile by getting the whole topic "No Doubt albums" to featured topic. If there's anything standing in the way of Tragic Kingdom becoming an FA, please let us know here. Tezkag72 (talk) 00:56, 1 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Giants2008 - Be forewarned that I have no experience with reviewing album articles, so I don't have great knowledge of what is expected.

Two fair-use images is going to cause a problem at FAC, where minimal use is becoming widespread. Consider dropping the DVD and just having the album cover; if a second image is needed, maybe use one of Stefani. Oh, and the "most famous" bit in the music sample caption may cause POV concerns. DoneTezkag72 (talk) 00:19, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"released on October 10, 1995 (see 1995 in music)," First, the comma after the parenthesis could be removed. The 1995 in music link can be put in a See also section before the references to get it out of the way. I sense that moving links like this to the bottom will become the next big FAC trend. DoneTezkag72 (talk) 14:22, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Background: "No Doubt released its debut album No Doubt in 1992" This is a redundancy. Here's a great way to remove it: "No Doubt released its self-titled debut album in 1992". That removes the redundancy while keeping the link destination clear. Done -- _{Escape Artist Swyer} ^Talk _{Contributions} 13:22, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Eric Stefani did not like to relinquish creative control to someone outside the band..." Perhaps try "Eric Stefani did not want..."? done -- _{Escape Artist Swyer} ^Talk _{Contributions} 13:37, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comma after The Beacon Street Collection. DoneTezkag72 (talk) 14:22, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Production: "and was interested in mixing No Doubt's new album. After mixing the first single, "Just a Girl", Palmer went on to mix the rest of the record." A lot of mixing going on here. FAC reviewers never like to see repetition, meaning that I suggest modifying this. done -- _{Escape Artist Swyer} ^Talk _{Contributions} 13:37, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The US dollar link can be removed, as similar links are typically deemed unnecessary in US-based topics. done -- _{Escape Artist Swyer} ^Talk _{Contributions} 13:37, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A lot of the comments above are nit-picky, but doing them now will save aggravation later. Hopefully you'll find them helpful. Giants2008 (17-14) 23:25, 11 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]