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The Price Is Right (US game show)

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This has been cleaned up further after comments left when it passed for GA. This may get main-page visibility when Bob Barker retires, and I was hoping to get some additional eyes on the article. Perhaps a bit ambitious to do so before his retirement date of June 15, but any improvement (even if not FA) is welcome. Please refer to the section on the quality of references on the talk page as well. Many thanks! —Twigboy 03:29, 29 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
 Additional information neededAppears to be well summarized in three paragraphs.—Twigboy 00:29, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done —Twigboy 23:53, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it should be changed to ==Biography==.[?]
 Done except The Showcase per the {{main}} link —Twigboy 23:53, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done—Twigboy 23:57, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per Wikipedia:Summary style.[?]
 Not done I think we are as condensed as possible for a 35-year program. Thoughts?—Twigboy 00:40, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
 Possible Cleaned up, still reviewing for more examples. Some are intentionally vague to express numerous or common events, as the history is long. Documentation for specific episodes can be scarce, as well. This isn't a cop-out, but just explaining that some are deliberate.
  • Avoid using contractions like (outside of quotations): didn't, isn't.
 Done—Twigboy 00:13, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?]
 Done Cleared a trailing space between a period and footnote, which may be the trigger for this.—Twigboy 00:02, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Perpetually a work-in-progress

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Twigboy 23:35, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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