Wikipedia:Peer review/The Office (U.S. TV series) season 4/archive1
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.
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I've listed this article for peer review because it failed its FLC a week ago mostly due to c/e issues. What is there still missing for this article to become a FL? Thanks, Nergaal (talk) 18:37, 5 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Agree this needs a copyedit, there are people willing to help with copyedits at WP:PRV. For example After Angela refuses to give in to Michael's unreasonable demands, Phyllis takes over the party planning committee and throws a huge bash for Toby's goodbye party, matching the joy in Michael's heart. what is it that matches the joy in Michael's heart? and why does this phrase belong in the sentence?
- Two refs are broken - current refs 26 and 27
- I am pretty sure this is an error The season was interrupted and shortened due to the effects of the 2007–2008 Writers Guild of America strike, in which both writers and actors from The Office went on strike. the writers were on strike, the actors were not, they honored the picket line
- Critical review seems a bit sparse for a whole season's worth of episodes
- Is the verb right here "Fun Run" received 9.7 million viewers overall.[27] does an episode really "receive" viewers? I think it can "attract" them or have them...
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:19, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
- Outside the critical review part, it should look better now. Any specific suggestions about the critical review? Nergaal (talk) 06:39, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
- Sorry to be slow in replying - I think it looks pretty good now (only reread the critcal review section and the box beside it). The only other thing I could think of would be if there were reviews of specific episodes that said it was the best/strongest/funniest episode of the season (or the worst...). Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:07, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
- Outside the critical review part, it should look better now. Any specific suggestions about the critical review? Nergaal (talk) 06:39, 16 September 2008 (UTC)