Wikipedia:Peer review/The Muppets' Wizard of Oz/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because after doing much work flying solo, The Muppets' Wizard of Oz reached GA status and I want to enter it for A-class and later submit it for FA-class, but I'm not sure if I've done enough to get it there. I've squeezed out as much information as I could off of the internet, but there could be more waiting to be uncovered or some books that could have some information too. I would GREATLY appreciate if someone could tell me about some (if any) that I could use. Tips to add more info to the article would be greatly be appreciated as well.
Also, please use Support or Oppose and tell me whether or not the article meets A-class status. The decision will be made after all of the votes are counted when this peer-review ends. Thanks!
Opinion
[edit]Thanks again, Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 20:31, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: First off, I think A class is usually decided by WikiProject reviewers according to project-based criteria, not some PR vote. You might want to ask on the relevant WikiProject talk pages for an assessment. As A class is usally substantially better than GA, I doubt this is there yet - see below.
I think this article is decent, and I learned some things about a TV film I did not even know existed, but it needs some work to get anywhere near FA status, so here are some suggestions.
- The lead does not summarize the article per WP:LEAD. For example, the Reception, Soundtrack, and Merchandise sections are not even mentioned at all, and most of Distribution is excluded too.
-DONE
- There is also material in the lead that is too specfic and not in the main article - why does the air date of It's a Very Merry Muppet Christmas Movie need to be in the lead of this article (especially when it is not mentioned at all in the rest of the article)?
- The article needs to be written from an out of universe perspective - see WP:IN-U. It might also benefit from more detailed comparisons to the book (on which it is said to be based) and the original movie, as well as other similar movies (like The Wiz, which is mentioned in passing).
-PARTIALLY DONE
- Every section needs references, including the Plot and the Cast (which have none now). This is especially true at WP:FAC
- Why is Miss Piggy identified for each character she plays in the plot section, but other major Muppets (Kermit, Gonzo, FOzzie Bear) are not mentioned here?
-DONE
- The Merchandise section is very short - could it be expanded or perhaps combined with another section (Distribution?)
-DONE
- Make sure all of the references are reliable - see WP:RS. I am not sure what counts for TV movies, but some of these seem questionable.
-DONE
- Also make sure the refs are complete - the Entertainment Weekly web site is credited as EW, for example.
-DONE
- Get a copy edit - prose is overall decent, but there are some places that need polish and a few typos / grammar problems. Examples but the positi[o]n was given to Kirk Thatcher. a short cameo (is there such a thing as a long cameo in a film), at least one place I saw with a verb problem (singular /plural).
- It is often very useful to hae a model article to follow - there are many film and television FAs, so find one close to what you think this could be and get to work.
- There are probably some print reviews of this from its original air date - go to a library and see if you can dig them up.
- FA calls for comprehensive coverage - this seems very short as is and a lot of the material (plot, cast) is not from independent sources.
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 21:03, 1 April 2008 (UTC)