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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan to promote it to GA. :)

Thanks, Khanassassin ☪ 20:34, 28 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "Released May 23, 2000" released on... but perhaps clumsy USEng now allows us to ignore basic grammar?!
  • "in its first week just in the US" -> "in the US in the first week alone."
  • Take both the above comments into account and write a nice sentence about how well it did in the first week following its release in the US....
  • Link "certified" in the lead.
  • "As of 2005 the album..." umm... it's 2012?
  • " by such magazines as " remove "such magazines as".
  • Avoid # for "number" in the prose.
  • "August 1999 - April 2000" see WP:DASH.
  • "In the album's title, The Marshall Mathers LP is a more serious and personal album than his major-label debut," don't know what this means. "In the album's title...." why does that make it more serious and personal?
  • " in both clean and explicit versions." suitable links for these kinds of releases?
  • Don't overlink The Slim Shady LP.
  • " ("Stan","I'm Back",& "Marshall Mathers")" spaces after commas!!
  • "Eminem went on to answer his critics more frequently in some of his later works." your opinion?
  • "Two lines in "Marshall Mathers" parody the song "Summer Girls" by LFO." ref?
  • "a few other words " not encyclopaedic.
  • "As of July 17, 2011" it's March 2012... any chance all of these "as of" can be updated to be more relevant?
  • "throat splitting" what is this?
  • Is the Track listing table compliant with MOS:DTT?
  • Samples, only one has a reference. Why?
  • Certifications table, put Hungary in the right place.
  • Don't mix date formats in the references.
  • Ensure ref titles meet WP:DASH.
  • Make sure refs have publisher, access dates, etc (e.g. see ref 81).
  • Check ref 43 as well. Odd stuff.
  • Foreign language sources need to use a lang= parameter.
  • Dead links.
  • Bare URLs.

The Rambling Man (talk) 19:41, 7 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

WP Comments
  • There's probably going to be a few months to several before I can get to working on this article, so I thought since you're interested now, I should give you a few notes.
  • The article is fully referenced by web sources. I know it has potential to grow into a very comprehensive contribution, but there are several printed sources that should be considered. Here are some biographic options.
  • By the looks of it, the article's layout is generally good. A section discussing the writing and recording would vastly improve its quality and comprehensiveness. Here's a lovely article from MTV News' archives on "Stan".
  • Chart and certification tables must undergo WP:DTT.
  • Are you sure the Controversy section is a summary of the entire Misogyny in hip hop culture article? If there is a slight relevance, you may consider {{See also}} or {{Further information}} instead.
  • Much of the information is unsourced and citations need to be provided. Again, printed sources work well.
  • My talk page is open if you have questions. It's great that you're working on this article. Good luck with GA, but it's a long way. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 21:15, 7 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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