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The Living Daylights

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It's a Good Article.

Thanks, Ultra! 08:37, 26 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

• Link " MI6 " in the lead.
• "of an actual Ian Fleming" need of "actual" here?
• Editing by in the infobox is missing.
• Bond and Milovy image caption is fragment so remove full stop. Same with the other screengrabs.
• Expand characters, particularly for the non-regulars.
• Punctuation in characters section needs work. Full stops...
• "Originally the film was proposed to be a prequell in the series. But the idea was dropped. SMERSH's motto "Smiert Spionon" From the short story formed the storyline.[2]" - typos, short sentences, sort this out...
• Casting section has a number of short paragraphs, flow these together to improve the prose.
• "The film was shot at the Pinewood Studios at its 007 Stage in UK, as well as Weissensee in Austria. The pre-title sequence was filmed on the Rock of Gibraltar. Other locations included Germany, the United States, and Italy. The desert scenes were done in Morocco. The conclusion of the film included the Schönbrunn Palace, Vienna and Elveden Hall, Suffolk." citations needed. Same for last para of Filming, it's entirely uncited.
• "The Living Daylights was the final Bond film to be scored by composer John Barry. The soundtrack is notable for its introduction of sequenced electronic rhythm tracks overdubbed with the orchestra - at the time, a relatively new innovation." no citations.
• Last para of Music is uncited.
• Five external links seems excessive.

That's it from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:17, 29 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Bzuk (talk · contribs)

• Use of numbers, zero to nine written out as words, 10 and up as numerals
• Delete use of Harvard comma throughout in the use of listing details (one, two and three rather than one, two, and three)
• Does casting belong with cast section or production, this is unclear
• All the endnotes are written incorrectly as to dates (use of ISO dating rather than m-d-y already established, all author notes should appear last name, first and middle name and period)

That's enough changes for now but work is needed. Bzuk (talk) 17:59, 12 April 2008 (UTC).