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The Coca-Cola Company

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MSNBC just slammed the article. We need to quickly fix this to our normal standards. -- Zanimum 18:43, 12 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked (Don't link September or Tuesday unless there is really good reason to). Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
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    • Started to stroke out things that didn't apply. How exactly can a javascript program judge copyediting? -- Zanimum 14:51, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      • Oh shoot- I forgot to change the wording for {{User:AndyZ/PR/copyedit}}. I'll fix that. By the way, about the first point, I was referring to the linking of years without full dates. While years can be linked (see WP:MOSDATE), they generally should be linked iff they provide context for the part in question. Andy t 19:43, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The History of the company is too short:
It needs to describe the foundation of the company, the origin of the company name and the original products. At present, the history section starts with World War II, some fifty years after the foundation of the company.
It needs to describe the company's development and global expansion after WWII.
It should describe the company's use of advertising to market its products around the world.
The information in the opening sentences of the Brands section could be more specific. According to the Coca Cola website, they 'offer nearly 400 brands in over 200 countries' - the number of brands gives an idea of scale as oppose to the vague 'other soft drink brands'.
Good luck with the article - Jazriel 08:29, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. I've changed the brands, is that of better relevance now? The history I'll have to leave to someone else. -- Zanimum 19:06, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I did some massive changes to the article (refactoring), the framework looks good, all that's needed rewording of the sentences, some added content etc 67.34.33.110 16:06, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
P.S: the problem is the article Criticism of Coca-Cola 67.34.33.110 16:06, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Agreed, that is the most important battle ground. To brief everyone, that section was split off the main article, is being shaved down and fixed, and then will be rejoined with this article. However, I'm personally more concerned with the content of the article besides the primary troubled section, as I know the Criticism section is already in good hands. -- Zanimum 19:06, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
As said above, this article needs attention to dates. This can be done quickly: simply copy the entire contents of User:Bobblewik/monobook.js to your own monobook. Then follow the instructions in your monobook to clear the cache (i.e. press Ctrl-Shift-R in Firefox, or Ctrl-F5 in IE) before it will work. This will give you a 'Dates' tab in edit mode. Hope that helps. bobblewik 17:56, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
As with Sesame Street, I see no errors in the dates. -- Zanimum 19:19, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Dude, (boblewik) did ya steal Quarl's date javscript?
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