Wikipedia:Peer review/Technetium/archive1

Technetium

Not exactly the most important element there is, nor is there much to say about it. But I think my recent expansion has moved it significantly toward FA quality. So, what else needs to be done to get it there? --mav 00:25, 23 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Note to reviewers: look at the recent discussion on the talk page. Jan van Male 15:39, 23 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Looks like most everything has been fixed now. --mav 02:03, 27 Apr 2005 (UTC)

It looks pretty good to me. There's a minor formatting problem down toward the end of the references section, but otherwise it's an interesting article. At least to me. — RJH 17:49, 23 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Looks really good, so the biggest issue I see is the lack of context for some more technical terms. Anything that would require following the wikilink for someone who has had high school chemistry should be explained at least somewhat in context. To me, that means the intro is almost fine, though of anything in the article, that should be even easier to understand. Examples include oxidizing, pertechnetate, paramagnetic, magnetic penetration depth, monoclonal antibody, meta states, etc. Another is that it is noted twice that "Its chemical properties are intermediate between rhenium and manganese", and we never exactly find out how that is, or what properties that refers too. All of the chemical properties listed? What about them is in between? Overall it is great, I learned a lot that never got covered in science classes, and every question I could think of going in was answered. - Taxman 15:54, Apr 25, 2005 (UTC)

Good points! I'll take a stab at fixing them, but only for the most important items as they relate to the subject since adding too much peripheral context will upset the flow. But I agree that the current balance is skewed a bit much toward those people with college level chemistry experience. --mav 17:12, 25 Apr 2005 (UTC)

I went through to quickly explain many of the items you mentioned, but most were already explained in context. I tried my best to explain other items, but many of the concepts can't be explained in-line without including an entire paragraph (which as I said would upset the flow). Also, things like 'magnetic penetration depth' are self-explanatory on the most basic level (the depth a magnetic field can penetrate into a substance). I was not able to fix the properties issue since my sources do not compare and contrast ; they just explain technetium's properties. Such a comparison would be boring anyway since most properties really are going to be somewhere inbetween rhenium and manganese (would be mind-numbing to keep saying pretty much the same thing over and over again). --mav 01:52, 27 Apr 2005 (UTC)