Wikipedia:Peer review/Tanna japonensis/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like it rated, I think it meets B-class requirements, and could perhaps be progressed towards GA.
Thanks, Chzz ► 13:46, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is interesting, well-illustrated, and a good start. I'm not a scientist, but I have a few suggestions from the point of view of a generalist familiar with Wikipedia.
Characteristics
- How much does the average Tanna japonensis" weigh?
- How many wings do they have? What is the typical wing span?
- What are their flight patterns? How far can they fly? Do they typically stay close to where they were born, or do they travel far or migrate?
Habitat
- What prevents Tanna japonensis from spreading to the Korean peninsula or to Vietnam or to the west of China or elsewhere? I'm assuming the answers to this might be multiple, but the article doesn't say.
- The second paragraph is unsourced even thought it contains information that is not common knowledge. It's a good idea to provide a source for any claim that might reasonably be questioned and to provide at least one source for every paragraph in the article.
- Is anything known about the origin of the species? Did the population appear to emanate from any known geographic center?
- What factors make Japan the best place for this insect?
- A map of the habitat range would be helpful.
Ecology
- This section is awfully short. Would it be useful to change it to "Life cycle" and add data about reproduction, life span, diet, social organization, and defense mechanisms?
Subspecies
- This section is awfully short as well. What endangered the subspecies? Did the people of Okinawa do anything specific to protect the subspecies?
Layout
- The existing layout suffers from many images squashing little text. It should become easier to amend the layout as the text sections expand. Generally, it's a good idea to keep illustrations and photos inside the section or subsection they relate to and not to allow images to overlap section boundaries or to displace the article's edit links.
General
- Would it be useful to add a section about the insect's cultural importance? You mention television shows in the "Call" section, but perhaps more could be said. Do the insects have any effect on economies? Do people eat them? Do the insects eat crops that have economic value? The 1960 postage stamp suggests that they are admired by humans? Does that postage stamp have a history that would explain something about the cultural value of the insect?
References
- The middle reference (Nakao, Shunichi) does not seem to be cited in the article.
- It would be good to track down more sources, if any can be found.
I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. Finetooth (talk) 19:03, 12 October 2009 (UTC)