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Stuart McCall

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I've listed this article for peer review because it's recently been promoted to a Good Article. I'd like to know what improvements, additions and edits would be needed to push it towards FAC. I know it's probably not ready for FAC, and needs some images, but some pointers in the right direction, would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks, Peanut4 (talk) 23:00, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of quick comments:

Regarding images, there are a couple on Flickr, it might be worth contacting the Flickr users to see if they would be willing to change the licensing to a Wikipedia-compatible Creative Commons one.
The main thing the article could do with is more detail on his time at Everton and Rangers, particlarly Rangers as he played through the majority of the nine in a row. I know that the sources you have will mean you have more information about his time at Bradford but more detail is warranted than In his first season at Ibrox, Rangers won the league and cup double etc.
Due to their brevity and the fact that they coincide with his playing career, the sections about his assistant manager could do with being merged into the Club career section. Perhaps a one or two sentence recap could be given at the start of the managenment section. Oldelpaso (talk) 13:59, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I've added a to do list on the talk page, for Everton, Rangers and Images. I have his autobio only for reference to Everton and Rangers at the moment, and I'd rather not rely on that, but will use it for some expansion.
I'll merge in his coaching career into relevant sections and keep that section for managerial posts only.
Thanks for your comments. Peanut4 (talk) 18:51, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Yeah, you need an image for FA definitely so Flickr is a good place to go begging...!!
Probably worth enforcing Association football somewhere to avoid a flogging from our US friends.
Really don't like the international goals "table" - it's got one entry! Add it into the prose.
Not keen on the section titles in the coaching section... no need to add his position in the titles in my opinion.
"Telegraph & Argus " - explain - is this a local paper, a national paper or what?
en-dash for page ranges in your citations.

Otherwise I'd head for FAC... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:33, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The goal already is in the prose. I personally like these sections, I know you don't, but with one entry, I realise it's probably redundant anyway, so will get rid.
The section titles are worded such as per WP:MOS#Section Headings to keep them unique. But if I reword as above, it's going to change anyway.
Yes, the Telegraph & Argus is Bradford's evening paper. It's mentioned a few times, so is there a particularly reason for you asking, so I can correct accordingly.
Again, thanks for your advice. Peanut4 (talk) 18:51, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]