Wikipedia:Peer review/Spitzer Space Telescope/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because the is involved in the discovery of TRAPPIST-1, which has been on news and received a crazy amount of visits in February. I believe that this article is quite important and I need your feedback to promote this article to Good or even featured. I need feedback on improving the article based on GA criterion.
Thanks, FriyMan talk 07:33, 2 March 2017 (UTC)
Comments by Smurrayinchester
[edit]- "Unlike most telescopes that are named after famous deceased astronomers by a board of scientists, the new name for SIRTF was obtained from a contest open to the general public." - it's not clear to me what this means. Spitzer was deceased at the time of launch - I assume the difference is that it was named by the public. I'd reword this a bit.
- I think there's too much info about Spitzer in the lead. I'd move it to later in the article.
- I've given it a copyedit, but it still has some clunky sentences. "Additionally, the atmosphere is opaque at most infrared wavelengths. This necessitates lengthy exposure times and greatly decreases the ability to detect faint objects. It could be compared to trying to observe the stars at noon." is a good comparison, but it could be made smoother.
- The Instruments section probably needs links - eg, to indium antimonide and spectrometer.
- The Results section is quite "bitty". Minor discoveries could be lumped together, and the subsections should be consistent (there's nothing until "GLIMPSE and MIPSGAL surveys", which are program names, then there's "2010s", which is a decade, then "Spitzer Beyond", another program name, and then "Planet hunter", a generic description).
- Images need alt text.
Smurrayinchester 14:58, 13 March 2017 (UTC)
Comments by Kees08
[edit]- Try to get as much information for citations as possible, including an access date when you verified the information was there.
- Each paragraph should have at least a citation in it. It will not get past GA without it.