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I've listed this article for peer review because my student is working on it this semester as part of a class project.
Thanks, Amy E Hughes (talk) 17:47, 15 November 2014 (UTC)
Hi Gilliark,
Great introduction. I think it is nice and succinct and functions well as an overview of the topic. I also appreciate the effort and care you have put into citing your sources throughout the entire article. It really adds to the article to give it credibility and authority.
This sentence in "Significance" is missing a word- "The sources of influence for the emerging national theatre of Spain were as diverse as the theatre that the nation produced during the Golden Age". Also, are you taking about the influence that the Spanish theater has had on the world at the time or the influence that other theater forms in other counties have had on Spanish theater? It wasn't that clear to me with the way some of the sentences are arranged and structured. I think the material is there, but you might need to re-arrange it so it flows a little easier.
Costumes-Did certain troops have their own small wardrobe of costumes? I remember talking about that in class. I think that might be worth mentioning.
I love the genres section. I think it is great that you pointed out that all types of drama were performed for all different types of audiences. This section is very thorough and well done!
Within the Actors and Companies section, it might be good to flush out more the fact that we started to see theater managers during Spanish Golden Age theater. You mentioned about companies and that actors worked for managers, but I think a little more information on the history and emergence of the managers would benefit this section.
Hope these comments helped. Overall-great job and I can't wait to read the finished product! Jsattler07 (talk) 19:34, 17 November 2014 (UTC)
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[edit]Excellent work, so far! Particularly well cited.
“as well as the in importance” – something is wonky there
Do you need a separate heading for the overview? Could it just go with the description above?
“accessible art form” what does that mean? All could attend? All did attend? Perhaps some elaboration is necessary.
Is “straight play” really a real term? Wow. I guess there’s a link. A “play” seems like an adequate term since there’s nothing needed to differentiate between them and musicals since that’s not really a thing yet.
Italicize comedia nueva
I think “loa” and “autos sacramentales” should also be italicized throughout. I’m not sure it’s capitalized either. You have quite a bit of Spanish words here that all may need italics—corrales, cazuelas, etc. Certainly you’ll want to italicize your play titles.
Do you feel that these should bulleted lists? Or paragraph descriptions? I feel like I'm used to seeing paragraphs rather than lists on Wikipedia. Up to you.
Your citations and references look really tidy. Keithpaulmedelis (talk) 20:04, 17 November 2014 (UTC)
Very nice work. However, a couple sections seem to consist primarily of bullet point when ordinary text would do better. For example, the subsections under Genres would be better in non-bulleted prose, as would the Actors and companies. The playwrights are fine in list form, but an introductory sentence would improve the section. Finally there are a few bits of odd wording - like "very unique" (unique means singular, "very" is redundant). Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:41, 17 November 2014 (UTC)