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Snow Patrol discography

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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to make sure the list is as good as possible before its nominated for being featured.

Thanks, Suede67 (talk) 09:15, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Doing... Brianboulton (talk) 23:27, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

About time! Any suggestions? Suede67 (talk) 09:09, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

~~About time? Sorry, I don't respond to remarks like that. Find someone else to review it. Brianboulton (talk) 16:36, 14 August 2009 (UTC)~~[reply]

??? It was in complete good faith! I wasnt expecting someone would pick it up so late, I was getting nervous the 10 days would pass. Suede67 (talk) 17:54, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

OK, understood (see your talkpage). I will get to the review shortly. Brianboulton (talk) 18:38, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Suede67 (talk) 18:39, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: Not much to say, really. The information looks comprehensive and well put together. A few suggestions on the prose:-

"Morrison left in 1995 - was he replaced?

His site says he "left due to a breakdown", so I'd say its unclear. I feel its better to say what the source says, rather than his site, as it could be biased. Suede67 (talk) 13:30, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Under this name they released their first EP, Starfighter Pilot, under the Electric Honey label." I have repunctuated, but can you avoid the "under the...", "under the..." repeat?

Done

"Jeepster Records" or "the Jeepster label" would be preferable to just "Jeepster".

Done

Presumably, "in 1998" not just "1998".

Done

Parentheses unnecessary around "to Snow Patrol".

Done

"...as Eric Avery, who had a side-project named Polar Bear threatened to sue." Too cryptic. You don't say who Eric Avery is, or what you mean by a side-project. I suggest a reword along the lines: "...because American bass player Ed Avery, who was already using the name "Polar Bear" in a recording project, threatened to sue."

Done

Date of release for Final Straw?

Done

Clarify whether Paul Wilson replaced Mark McClelland.

Done

Give dates for Final Straw tour and Eyes Open release.

Done

Explain what you mean by "boosted by the success of Chasing Cars".

Done

That is pretty well all I can find. Brianboulton (talk) 13:09, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Suede67 Comments: I have fixed all what you have suggested. But I do have a doubt though. The music videos section; there are 3 for which the director isn't known (in any sources for that matter). Will this be a problem in the FL nomination? Thanks for your review! I didnt think of those finer points that needed addressing. Suede67 (talk) 13:29, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I am not very familiar with the FLC process, but if you have tried every known source and have been unable to find references to the directors of these videos, I do not imagine this will affect the outcome. Just note it in your nom statement. Brianboulton (talk) 16:38, 20 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, thanks for your reply! Suede67 (talk) 17:26, 20 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]